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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2002-02-10 03:47 PM


Riding out the storm
blows upon the wayward winds
rolling on the waves I ride
crashing in the end.

Frightened by the sound of thunder
pouring down in rain
rocks me steady, slowly
coursing through my pain.

Like an undertow that threatens
and tries to pull me down
swimming farther to the side
in the twilight turned around.

Perhaps the days will run together
filtering through the sunlight
no longer will I notice
what taunts me in the night.

The tossing and the turning
ideals made of dreams
relinquishing all fear
of drowning out at sea~

Warming to the trends
scorched by the burning sun
beneath a sky that has no limits
where lightening strikes but once.


© Copyright 2002 BluesSerenade - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
1 posted 2002-02-10 03:56 PM


Blues Serenade,
In this stormy write lightening striking once is enough to illuminate your wonderful words. Fabulous.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



ShadowRider
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2 posted 2002-02-10 05:06 PM


Sweet LA, sigh
don't know what the odds are, but by braving the storm, standing out in it,
you can increase your chances of being struck by a 'good' lightening. *s*
Perhaps the taunts are just directional winds that must blow.  Sail with,
not against, and the ~Sea~ shall be your friend.  
At least, she has always been a good friend to me.  

your writing as of late has been filled with a certain poetic magic.
You're an awesome lady, ya know that? *smiles*
tSR

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2002-02-10 05:21 PM


Kethry~ I apprciate your kind words, truly I do.  Thank you very much.

SR~ Something just triggered my mood today.
I'll give you one guess!  
Thank you for leaving your nice comments,
As long as I keep my head above water I'll survivie this too.  

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
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Michigan
4 posted 2002-02-10 06:05 PM


This is a beautiful, frightening poem, Blues.
As a person who sails, I appreciate and respect thunderstorms at sea.
Thanks for sharing it with us.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Dulcinea
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5 posted 2002-02-10 06:28 PM


Riding out the storm is sometimes easier beneath the surface where the water is calm. But as all storms do, they pass, and you never know where lightening will strike again, it is a proven fact, it can strike twice...hold on to the anchor, you will conquer that raging sea, BS.

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859

6 posted 2002-02-10 06:34 PM


love your words Blue
"Frightened by the sound of thunder
pouring down in rain
rocks me steady, slowly
coursing through my pain."
and all the rest of it. great write. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

SEA
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with you
7 posted 2002-02-10 07:13 PM


I love nothing better than a good storm at the ocean this felt like a swirling of emotions though...push and pull of inner thoughts....very well done!
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
8 posted 2002-02-10 07:45 PM


Madame C~ I frighten myself sometimes.
It's a good thing I know when to come up for air.  
Thanks for reading and leaving that huffing and puffing cloud.

Dulcinea~ Thank you for your encouraging words.    
I do appreciate them and you.

Floria~ It's not always smooth sailing
but it's nothing I can't handle.  I learned
to swim before I could walk which has
worked in my favor more times than not.
I'm so glad you came by to read, thanks.

SEA~ You read my mind so well.
If I can weather one storm I can
weather them all, just have to give it
the old heave ho!!  Thanks SEAgal~
  

amusemi
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A State of Disarray
9 posted 2002-02-11 07:35 PM


The rhythm is terrific, almost a torrid rocking sensation.

Great write.

Mistletoe Angel
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10 posted 2002-02-11 07:44 PM




BRAVO!!! I LOVE IT!!! You describe the storm so wonderfully with your dazzling imagery, sweet friend, this is marvelous! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, your love and wisdom are always an undertow of poetic beauty! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

GenXer
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since 2001-12-15
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11 posted 2002-02-11 09:50 PM


If you can brave the stormy sea, you can get through most anything that life throws at you.  Well done.

Dave

catalinamoon
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12 posted 2002-02-11 11:09 PM


Beautifully descriptive. And it exudes strength.
Sandra

Larry C
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13 posted 2002-02-12 01:49 AM


Lori,
So which wins out? Hopefully the storm loses! I love nature poems a lot. Thanks for this. The images tell your story well.

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
14 posted 2002-02-12 12:18 PM


amusemi~ A torrid, rocking sensation it is!!  You hit right on it!  
Thank you for that.

Noah~ Dazzling you say?  No one ever told
me that before.  Thank you thank you.

GenXer~ Can I call you Dave?  Yes, the sea is a treacherous place to be, but I'm tougher than I look.  Thank you for
reading and for your nice reply.

Sandra~ I'm glad you picked up on the strength in there somewhere.  It's the
old sink or swim syndrome, in reality
there is only one option.  Thanks~

Larry C~  I'm not about to get wiped out in a storm.  I know how to use my survival tactics, I've had lots of practice and furthermore, I'm no pushover!!     
Thank you!

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