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Marsha
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0 posted 2002-02-08 07:34 PM


Pierced

Pierced
I’ve been
Shot
The arrow
Passed cleanly
Through me
I was
Pierced
By you

The wounds
Bled
Red
Blood dripping
Down the
Crown

I was
Pierced
By you

Speared
I’ve been
Lanced
The shaft
Driven through
Release
Such peace
I was
Speared
By you

The marks
Show
I know
Still I bleed
Love flows
It flows

I was
Speared
By you

Marsha


Forgive me darling poets I'm still trying brevity and free verse.

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


© Copyright 2002 Marsha Grace Melody Todd - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-08 07:37 PM


*giggling* silly girl...there is nothing to forgive this poem is wonderful and tells how deeply you feel his love within you...I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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2 posted 2002-02-08 07:38 PM


I hope it didnt hurt too much.. OUCH,, nice one Marsha, enjoyed immensely. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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3 posted 2002-02-08 07:47 PM


Karren darling girl thank you yes HE is in my thoughts very much today. And thank you for putting up with my little attempts at free verse and brevity. Keth tells me that if I try to make one word do the job of six then I’m getting somewhere.

Am I getting somewhere?

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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4 posted 2002-02-08 07:47 PM


Floria darling girl thank you muchly, you are so right indeed, ouch,
I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’m trying that’s all I can say I’m trying


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

:kiss

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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5 posted 2002-02-08 07:56 PM


Marsha, darling girl. This is stunning. I can visualize your bleeding body exploding with love's ecstasy radiating lightning bolts into the heavens. I am captured and mesmerized by your images. Wonderful work, Mushy.
((Marsha))
-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Marsha
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6 posted 2002-02-08 08:11 PM


Newell darling boy you are always sooooooooo incredibly good to me thank you x x x x I’m trying something different and I appreciate you

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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7 posted 2002-02-08 08:18 PM


Mushy,
Keth must have a burning desire to be a teacher. LOL Stop with the disclaimer. No apologies required or appropriate. At least you're trying. That is more than I am doing! Enjoyed.

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8 posted 2002-02-08 08:28 PM


Larry darling boy Keth has ever been my guide in my journeys into free verse. It’s no so much as she wishes to teach but she does encouragement very very well. As for the disclaimer, I’m really not convinced by this free verse at all, I feel like saying sorry it doesn’t rhyme.

Anyway I'm glad you liked it but it will sink like a stone, I know it I

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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9 posted 2002-02-08 08:39 PM




YAY!!! Ooohhhhhhh...this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I hope that the cupids have showered you with arrows and filled your heart with true loves agic! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, you are a delight to us all, you always make me smile! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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10 posted 2002-02-08 08:48 PM


Marsha - no forgiving needed. I do like the new style that you are doing. It becomes you...

BC

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11 posted 2002-02-08 09:08 PM


this style works for you Mushy...I like it very much!!
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12 posted 2002-02-08 09:20 PM


Marsha...sounds like cupid has been out and about with his arrow.  Sometimes love hurts..hope for you it hurts good.  I really liked the way you wrote this..short bursts..in both meaning and words.
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13 posted 2002-02-08 09:29 PM


Marsha, quite a departure from your usual but very well done. Enjoyed this tremendously and it does wonder for me to find that you too are still working on free verse. I'm trying hard not to rhyme, which for me is almost impossible. Thanks for sharing your wonderful try. Cheryl
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14 posted 2002-02-08 10:14 PM


Noah darling boy thank you so very very much, I really do appreciate the time you take to read and reply

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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15 posted 2002-02-08 10:16 PM


Bill darling boy thank you soooooooo much for the encouragement Do I ever tell you that you are valued? You are thank you muchly always


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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16 posted 2002-02-08 10:18 PM


Circe darling girl thank you so very much I am always pleased to see you poetic smile on my post YOU are very special you know. Take care always

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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17 posted 2002-02-08 10:21 PM


Martie darling girl YES I’m as stuck full of the arrows as I can be. And I’m happy very very happy. I expect it shows doesn’t it, Mmmm I simply can’t and won’t stop smiling


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


Marsha
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18 posted 2002-02-08 10:22 PM


Cheryl darling girl thank you love I appreciate it. It is a vast difference from my normal style but oh it’s sooooooooo much harder to write briefly. I have to find one single word when normally I can get away with ten. You keep trying love I’m sure you’ll crack it

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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19 posted 2002-02-09 03:15 AM


Marsha, my mushy one...your wings are showing in spirit lifted love.
The credit is all yours and I am amazed!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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20 posted 2002-02-09 05:41 PM


Marsha - You are really mixing up your styles these days.  I liked this a lot.  Well done.

Dave

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