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A Swan Song
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A Swan Song |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A Swan Song He was only ten and sometimes unsure teasing seemed to aim its arrow at him and he fell into thinking something was wrong with him with his skinny arms with his freckles something At a park where the ducks were he was scattering the birds throwing pieces of bread into the lake where two swans were engaged in a love dance their necks and heads bobbing His mother explained it when he was nine and full of questions, neat is what he thought into the warm spring day Two boys with bats snickering behind their hands threw rocks skipped the water and caught one swan on the side Anger grew inside him as he headed towards the two now collapsed in gales of laughter They looked up in surprise at the anger trembling blotched cheeks the clenched fists for the words that he hit them with were power he learned that day as he left the boys sitting with their mouths open He took off his jacket flung it over his shoulder, and holding it with one finger he whistled as he walked away knowing there was something right something right about him something _________ 1-24-01 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) God Bless that sweet little boy, I was admired by the courage he showed in tehse words to protect the lovely swans! (big hugggsssssss) People can be so cruel sometimes, but also so loving and respectful! God Bless You, sweet friend, this poem made me cry, we all love you so much, this is beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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amigo Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 520the earth school |
I love your special way of giving expression to the words, Martie....thank you for sharing... |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Excellent. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a compelling read, and I love the twist at the end. marvelous mmmmmmmartie! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love it Martie!! *of course as soon as I saw your name on it I loved it!* ~Higs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
BRAVO!!!!BRAVO!!!!Something right indeed...absolutely magnificent. I love it...**big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
A nice story with a happy ending. My favorite kind. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Martie, I loved the ending of this! "He took off his jacket flung it over his shoulder, and holding it with one finger he whistled as he walked away knowing there was something right something right about him something" Now that is some fantastic imagery. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Fantastic imagery and speaking of fantastic imagery - fantastic new photo Martie  very becoming.The older I grow, the less important the comma becomes. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
For every victim, a hero. Like the new photo a lot, Martie! Like the poem just as much... |
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