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Waiting for the Wrath of Mars (for ecrivan)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 02-08-2002 05:45 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

I write these words with trembling hand--
remembering times I summoned Gods.
A challenge, now, from ecrivan--
so warily I called Nimrod:
"I pray you grant me cunning, Sir--
the keen of eye and stealth of foot--
lend to me a draught of strength
and courage to do what I should."


"You have the fearlessness of child."
Surprisingly, his voice was mild.
"Tell me then, what is your prey
that makes you carry on this way?"


Defiantly, I raised my chin,
but wavered voice betrayed chagrin.
"I do not know what I long for,
but I must hunt the God of War."


"You must be weary of your life--
it's not enough that you know Strife?,
nurtured by the vile Discord--
you ask for that you ill afford!"


I lowered eyes and studied floor.
"I do not wish to embrace War--
yet should I be denied my stay--
I swear that I'll die anyway!"


"You are brave, but most unwise.
Go then, child, to your demise."
As all the stars of heaven cried,
I shuddered as Orion sighed.
Muttering, he waved one arm,
"Strength can't keep you safe from harm."


*


Thus I withdrew to Hermit's cave.
I fasted there for forty days.
With bloodied hands, I dug my grave,
and prayed my sins would be forgave.


I cleansed myself through salt of tears,
as one by one, I battled fears.
I had to first survive the Hell,
and slay the demons birthed by self.


I watched the sky as planets moved.
I gathered herb. I hummed The Tune
of Summoning--I could not sing--
until I felt the quickening.


*     *


Incantation knows not pen.
Words in whispers must be kept.
but know that some Gods' names are sung,
while other names of Gods are wept.
Forgive the silence of my ink.
I cannot tell you--you must think--
the rule of rite of summoning--
repose~realized~remembering...


*     *     *


Thus came the dusk, night 'thirty-nine,'
I felt the need of fire's heat.
I gathered rowan from the field.
I bundled twigs, encircling me.


Around the raging eye of oak
and sandalwood of heady smoke--
I wailed as labor pain began--
I wept his name in love's recant.


I called him, Ares, of the Greek--
then scorned the Roman Mars as meek,
boasting that I danced on grave
and all the world was finally saved
from Panic, Trembling and Terror.
The sons of War, enslaved forever.
His minions now were mine--by whim--
into the night, I laughed at him.


Thereupon, the ground did split,
and I fell deep into the Pit.
Scenes of rape and riotry,
crimes of war and bigotry--
the taste of bile rose in my throat--
and I collapsed before his throne.


*     *


"WHO DOES DARE TO CALL ON ME?
A poet? writing poetry?
She calls herself serenity!
Cute." He snarled derisively.


"Let her burn.
She's a disgrace.
Let her scream
for sin of haste."


*


I did the only thing I knew--
I wailed to him--"But I love you!
I gladly gave up light of stars
to gaze upon the face of Mars.
You are the mighty son of Zeus!
I betrothe myself to you.
I offer love as sacrifice.
I stand before you, trembling bride.
For you, I would die willingly,
but first, I pray, you lay with me..."


*     *

I looked into his blue-flamed eyes--
and he smiled to my surprise.
"What a cunning bit of wile--
you are indeed a wicked child!
How did you know what I long for?
Alas, I can't make love and war.
But would I could, I'd make you wife,
but never shall I betray Strife."


"You've pleased me, so I'll let you go,
but no one else must ever know
that on the Earth was moment's peace
when God of War showed his mercy."


*     *     *


I penned these words
by light of stars:
"serenity
dares wrath of Mars..."


*     *


Orion writes across the sky
in twinkled script--he winks--"nice try."


*



[This message has been edited by serenity (02-08-2002 08:37 AM).]

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Kethry
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1 posted 02-08-2002 05:56 AM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

serenity,
Nice try...to seduce Mars and walk away unscathed is no mean feat. To write about it with such style is amazing.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


Janet Marie
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2 posted 02-08-2002 08:54 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Incantation knows not pen.
Words in whispers must be kept.
but know that some Gods' names are sung,
while other names of Gods are wept.
Forgive the silence of my ink.
I cannot tell you--you must think--
the rule of rite of summoning--
repose~realized~remembering...


Thus came the dusk, night 'thirty-nine,'
I felt the need of fire's heat.
I gathered rowan from the field.
I bundled twigs, encircling me.

Around the raging eye of oak
and sandalwood of heady smoke--
I wailed as labor pain began--
I wept his name in love's recant.

I called him, Ares, of the Greek--
then scorned the Roman Mars as meek,
boasting that I danced on grave
and all the world was finally saved
from Panic, Trembling and Terror.
The sons of War, enslaved forever.
His minions now were mine--by whim--
into the night, I laughed at him.

===================================
"WHO DOES DARE TO CALL ON ME?
A poet? writing poetry?
She calls herself serenity!
Cute." He snarled derisively.


"Let her burn.
She's a disgrace.
Let her scream
for sin of haste."

I did the only thing I knew--
I wailed to him--"But I love you!
I gladly gave up light of stars
to gaze upon the face of Mars.
You are the mighty son of Zeus!
I betrothe myself to you.
I offer love as sacrifice.
I stand before you, trembling bride.
For you, I would die willingly,
but first, I pray, you lay with me..."

==========================================


OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What did you eat before bed baby????
I want some of what youre having!!!
KAREN??!!??!!! Do you know how AWESOME this is????? Do you know how cool this is????
You just kicked poetic butt girlie...
this is an epic inspire...as my sweet Sy says...this is EPOPEE!!
I dont know what the challenge was but good grief I know you had to have taken it to new heights...look at the imagery in this...and the metaphor and rhyme divine ... talk about working a theme to poetic perfection.
Your muse is a heavenly body me twin ...
and this is more impressive than I can express. Hows the view from up there baby
Yer so keeeewwwwl
Janet Marie
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3 posted 02-08-2002 01:05 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

*library*
filed under K for KEWWWWWL  

You speak to me in riddles and you speak to me in rhymes.
My body aches to breathe your breath ... your words keep me alive.

~Sarah McLachlan~

serenity blaze
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4 posted 02-08-2002 03:05 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Oh well. I guess I wrote past the average attention span, huh?

Thanks for sticking with it, Keth, and Jan!

I think everybody should write their own hero's journey...

this one was a lot of fun, and for a few hours last night, I was in mythology land!

Thanks for reading, my little epic--I am grateful.
Janet Marie
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5 posted 02-08-2002 03:26 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"WHO DOES DARE TO CALL ON ME?
A poet? writing poetry?
She calls herself serenity!
Cute." He snarled derisively.
===================================

YES ...she is a poet!!!!
a damn fine one ...
and yes...shes cute too.
No mere myth-God is a match for her or her muse.
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Mine is not the average attention span.  This is not the average poem.  Excellent in its thought and form.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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WOW!!! OH MY GOSH, THIS IS A TRUE CLASSIC EPIC, I LOVE IT!!! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) Oooooohhhhhh...your words always make justice and imagery come alive, this is fabulous, we can be anyone in our words and you are a true heroine of the pen!!! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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8 posted 02-08-2002 06:36 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Does the word 'submit'!!! mean anything??? This is truly exceptional!
ecrivan
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A true pleasure reading what can flow from the human hand and spirit, and having thus expressed your challenge to fight the God War,my ruling planet nonetheless!!Oh Queen of Hearts what can I do to seek your generous forgiveness leave your orchard of hearts and return to my accursed land of mortal souls Great stuff would like to see more of this(shorter ones are good too..hehe)

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serenity blaze
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10 posted 02-08-2002 06:55 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Kethry you are my "bud". I appreciate your replies and when they are complimentary I'm thrilled, because you call 'em as ya see 'em.

Janet, you are a nut! Gawd, but I love you, what would I do without you watching my back, hmmm?

Moonlight Romeo, I thank you so much for taken the time to read my rather long winded saga, here. My gratitude.

Noah, sweet Noah, I wish I had just a grain of your enthusiasm. Thank you for the applauding thingies!

Poet D--submit is something that I am working on...grin, we'll chat later!

and now ecrivan, I must thank you, because I had more fun writing this than I have had writing in a long time. I just lost track of all space and time, and yes, the lenghth concerned me, but when I went back to edit? Everything meant something to me...so it stayed. Thanks again for the challenge. No forgiveness necessary.
Janet Marie
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and THIS ONE!!!!!!!!!!!!

BRILLIANCE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

you are poetry in motion me twin...

Janet Marie
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12 posted 07-18-2005 12:43 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I watched the sky as planets moved.
I gathered herb. I hummed The Tune
of Summoning--I could not sing--
until I felt the quickening.
*     *
Incantation knows not pen.
Words in whispers must be kept.
but know that some Gods' names are sung,
while other names of Gods are wept.
Forgive the silence of my ink.
I cannot tell you--you must think--
the rule of rite of summoning--
repose~realized~remembering...
*     *     *
Thus came the dusk, night 'thirty-nine,'
I felt the need of fire's heat.
I gathered rowan from the field.
I bundled twigs, encircling me.
Around the raging eye of oak
and sandalwood of heady smoke--
I wailed as labor pain began--
I wept his name in love's recant.


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Have I mentioned that you ROCK!!
On my best muse day, I could never write at this level.... you define poetry.
LeeJ
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13 posted 07-18-2005 10:49 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

I have not a word to aptly describe the awesome poetic visions you project...in story teller's mode

amazing and left speechless, no dumbfounded....incredible writing lady!
latearrival
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All I can say is, Why have you never published? Looking for a new direction as you are? You have a calling, not faint,but loud and clear to all. Alas you do not hear and act much to our regret.  Love, latearrival
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15 posted 09-17-2013 01:19 AM       View Profile for water_stained_wisdom   Email water_stained_wisdom   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for water_stained_wisdom

As are we ...
her books are in mourning,
weeping each unturned page"



Untitled Tears


From this moment on ...
all the words unwritten,
belong to only you.

In this sudden stillness, time unravels ...

memories draped in shadowed silhouette
your rhymes fall around me
(cadenced pirouettes)

a promise to remember
(as if I could ever forget)


"tortured beacons give off the most light"


(if only the past was as easy to re-write)


archived echos etched in shades of fading blue,

may the goddesses be as merciful on us all ...

its going to take much more than poetry
to fill this sorrowed silence of you.


~~~~~~~~~

jm ... for "lovie" ... (ikykikyk)

******
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hhY4LSqY3Ak


"So don't leave me ... but I know you're justified"



*****

Ghosts Of Jackson Square
  by Edwin McCain

Ghost on the street today
Doorways of Jackson Square

In tinsel and tap shoes
Mardi Gras beads in her hair
Down to the graveyard
She wrung out her hands
As if he will meet her
All day she stands

So don't leave me
but I know you're justified

So don't leave me
Cause a part of you in me died

We wish ourselves beautiful
We cry in the night
And it's not the love you feared
But the fall from the height


My personal ledges
Afraid to look down
My crepe paper bridges
Enough water to drown
Mysteria
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16 posted 09-17-2013 01:04 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

This left me breathless,

a promise to remember
(as if I could ever forget)


"tortured beacons give off the most light"


(if only the past was as easy to re-write)


Little did you know that is exactly where she is going to rest, right at Jackson Square.  The Gemini circle will never, ever be broken.  She is in my very heart and soul.  

It will take way more that poetry - way more.  A love like this one aches forever.  Thank you. ♥


Carpe' Diem

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No mere myth-God is a match for her or her muse.

How right you are!  It is the unspoken words that are going to be an the ache.
water_stained_wisdom
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18 posted 09-18-2013 06:40 AM       View Profile for water_stained_wisdom   Email water_stained_wisdom   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for water_stained_wisdom

thank you Sharon,

It was hard to choose which poem to use as there were so many of her emotionally lovely style that I had set aside, but I picked this one as it showcased her exceptional talent to take a theme and craft the metaphor, imagery and rhyme to a higher level..and because as she said in her reply, she enjoyed writing it on a higher level as well.  

I met her here in the blue...it was only right that I say goodbye here as well.

*May she find her peace in the mystic*

Continued thoughts and prayers to her family in this exceptionally overwhelming time of loss.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s_Pn4OF2ktc

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19 posted 09-18-2013 01:26 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

You know I thought of something last night - the fact that Karen's closest friends in Passions each had a "different connection," with her.  Your mutual love of music for instance, and your love of using the dictionary as your canvas.  With me I couldn't write like you two, but I could sure listen to her heart, and help in ways that worked.  Those conference calls - remember?  LOL, we could laugh long and hard on the phone and at least that one day was better.  Each of us shared a different facet of that jewel.  There was a full moon here last night, and I remember us laughing at ME when I said once, "We have a big full moon tonight here, do you in New Orleans?"  Doh!  I used to call her my blue butterfly, and tell her some day she would be free of worries.  I hated those hurricanes!

I hope she will be running up and down the French Quarter with flowers in her hair, bare feet, and have more Mardi Gras beads on that anyone ever has!  I did this up a long time ago, never thinking that peace would become reality.

     
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20 posted 01-31-2014 10:34 AM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Amazing really! Dear Karen, treasure box of life's emotions, where are you sharing your soul's beauty?

Missing you and your sharp mind.

Sharon, what a beautiful message and image!

Thinking of you, dear Karen, with love and admiration.

Margherita
 
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