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Convergence |
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quietwaters Junior Member
since 2002-02-04
Posts 30delray beach, florida |
Convergence (An Ode to Friendship) i tell you how alone i have been so you can know how much you have brought me; you, and yours... gifts of selves the selfish and the whole the ones we always manage to hide the ones we've always managed to hide behind there the weakness there the unthinkable shame there the craven, wanting, needful creature keeping to the safe, the road most taken there the strength there the belief that as a spider spins out a filament so strong it surpasses the strength of steel (to span an emptiness) so can we weave -- from darkness and doubt, from the juxtaposition of differences -- and again, weave, a tie to bind spirit to spirit... and there perhaps a deeper fall and there perhaps a strength made stronger i spell out comfort with pillow-talk and drive out the cold with warmth that i hope will never have an absent day and yes, oh yes... the scroll of friends, ever changing names all silver..all gold... "unforgettable...that's what you are... in every way...and forevermore that's how you'll stay...." i spell out my joy with the sum of my sorrows snatch out that sunbeam like it was a brush to paint raindrops off my window-pane... there the dark, the unknown, the deluge... there the unbearable feather-flight of my soul there... convergence *** (Note: i just had to borrow nk cole's lines for that part ("_"). i felt his song said it better. if this makes the work less than desired, please forgive me. if this was a work i had planned for publication, i would not have included it. to the moderators: if i have broken a cardinal rule in including a quote, please feel free to take the entire work out.) ray |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I think this is fantastic writing...and I think the quote is ok....  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) There is no need to apologize, sweet friend, you have cited the source properly and honestly and this is a beautiful quote! (big hugggsssss) This is a wonderful ode, sweet friend, your words are always so fantastic, we all love you so so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ray, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Ray, this is absolutely marvelous. I like it, I do! Kat |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a beautiful poem! I love it. There is nothing wrong with using anothers words like that, as you put it into quotes and also credited the source. I really like the content and the flow of your ideas, and look forward to reading more. Thank you for sharing this one. May the ripple of LOVE |
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quietwaters Junior Member
since 2002-02-04
Posts 30delray beach, florida |
thank you guys.. very much. |
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