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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you swam in my ocean against the dark currents you begged me with your eyes to give you my strength I heard your whispers when your mouth was wet with drowning sounds and lifted you from the tides you said I was your salvation that my hands were your security that my fingers were your want places and that you loved the view when I put you above the others and let the sun touch you first and the night leave you last you said I was your comfort then you said my hands made walls that you could not see over and that you missed the depths below with freedom to swim your thoughts my eyes looked another way my strength whispered farwell I reached down over my ocean and let you slip between my fingers ©Dark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (02-06-2002 01:30 PM).] |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Wow... outstanding! loved this! ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* sensually magnificent...Very beautiful writing...**big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Tiersdin, humble thanks for your review Startime, a pleasure to have your eyes review me thank you |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS "then you said my hands made walls that you could not see over and that you missed the depths below with freedom to swim your thoughts my eyes looked another way my strength whispered farwell I reached down over my ocean and let you slip between my fingers" This hit me in my understanding...freedom is a gift of love. Wonderful writing! [This message has been edited by Martie (02-06-2002 02:03 PM).] |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
This is some awesome writing, pure skill shown here. I loved it!! Keep up the great work DS Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
an in depth write..beautiful D ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Martie, thank you for your moments...yes freedom is a special place/word Randy, I thank you sir for your review NT, I always appreciate your thoughts, thank you |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
letting go is so hard.... when the emotions are so strong.... I wonder if you know how much this touches, and feels, thank you for this  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkStranger~ This is just the loveliest of pieces~ Such tenderness lingers in my thoughts after reading it~ GREAT poetry~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
...sigh... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
SEA, thank you for your words and sweet whispers Marge, it is a pleasure to have your eyes on my humble thoughts Passing Shadows, thank you for your sigh |
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