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Victoria
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0 posted 2002-02-03 04:35 PM



I see a sleepy river
dancing within your eyes
flowing within the channels
of my soul
a sweet fragrance
of magnolia
dances in the breeze

a sleepy sapphire river
flowing from your heart to mine
it is just a matter of time
soothing my ache for love

your sleepy river eyes
tantalizes me
kissing ruby lips
with budded mist of thee
flowing over a waterfall
into raging rivers of my heart

embers of fireflies
serenade midnight skies
while sleepy river swans
dance within your eyes


You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

                                                -Ziggy

[This message has been edited by Victoria (02-04-2002 12:52 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-03 04:44 PM


Oh Victoria!  This is exquisite!  Bill will love it I'm sure.  Challenge well met!
~Hugs, Nancy~

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  So you won't ever forget me~

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2 posted 2002-02-03 04:45 PM


Victoria...you never cease to amaze me with
what you can make of such a sleepy little
subject...Challenge well met.

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3 posted 2002-02-03 05:37 PM


thank you Nancy...i enjoyed the challenge..hugs

Barry..thank you so much..appreciate your kind comments

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4 posted 2002-02-03 06:25 PM


Yep! This is a good one! Challenge well met.
Just love those sleepy rivers. So romantic. ((Victoria))

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5 posted 2002-02-03 06:33 PM


I loved the entire piece, but


embers of fireflies
serenade midnight skies
while sleepy river swans
dance within your eyes


really is beautifully formed

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6 posted 2002-02-03 06:44 PM


You are the absolute queen of imagery, Victoria...
This is so very beautiful!

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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7 posted 2002-02-03 07:53 PM


~V~

In complete AWE of this.... beautiful....


Lauren~

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barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

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8 posted 2002-02-03 08:24 PM


newell...thank you so much..have super sunday

annie..thank you annie...glad you enjoyed hon

madame..thank you very much for your lovely compliments

lauren...thank you Lauren..pleased you enjoyed...i enjoyed the challenge

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9 posted 2002-02-03 08:58 PM




(smiles) Ooohhhhhhh...this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your lovely words always cascade like waterfalls in your heart, this is a beautiful challenge that I just know Bill will love! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet freind, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautfiul heart, sweet Victoria, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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10 posted 2002-02-03 10:58 PM


Oh my gosh...this poem is absolutely stunning...Bill will just love it...Magnificent. **big hugs**

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11 posted 2002-02-03 11:52 PM


thank you noah...hugss

karen...thank you very much karen...always nice to hear from you ..hugss

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12 posted 2002-02-05 11:22 PM


Victoria - I did miss this and I don't know how I did. This is magnificent, and flows with the sleepy river. Excellent, excellent.

BC

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13 posted 2002-02-06 08:27 AM


It was fun writing and thank you for the challenge bill

                    ~Victoria~

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

                                                -Ziggy

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