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vandana
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0 posted 2002-02-03 10:35 AM



I wondered why
So many times
In my life,
Pieces of my heart,
Pieces of a paper,
As I sat down to write
But It seems like
my broken heart
Wanted to write few words
Of a memory
That left my heart broken
You will find
pieces of my heart
You will find
pieces of a broken heart
you will find
so many songs
has to be sung
Pieces of my life
That closed my door
forever,
But I
know
There Is sill time
for me to understand why
This would have happened
To my heart
So many days
So many ways
of my life
To fix my heart
In one,
Pieces of my heart


[This message has been edited by vandana (02-03-2002 10:39 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-03 10:40 AM




(sigh) There are many ways to mend a broken heart always, and as long as you believe in yourself and love yourself, your heart will rebuild and you will find the greatest happiness you could ever dream of! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a wonderful expression of both heartbreak and the vow of hope! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vandana, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

ecrivan
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2 posted 2002-02-03 10:52 AM


I like the message and sorrow dripping from the lines, perhaps you might want to avoid though separating the but I on one line from the know on the next to match the beat of the rest of the poem?just a thought


strbbux
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3 posted 2002-02-03 11:52 AM


This is very nice Vandana, I enjoyed reading it. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Startime
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4 posted 2002-02-03 12:36 PM


*sigh* I know this feeling well...I have pieces of my heart laying all over the place...My heart goes out to you. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

amusemi
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5 posted 2002-02-03 12:47 PM


A little glue
A little paint
A lot of time
It's not too late
You'll love again
They always say
Even when
Love walks away
Your pieces gather
And then create
A heart repaired
A mosaic made!!!

dgvarner
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6 posted 2002-02-03 01:34 PM


seems pieces of our hearts are sometimes easily written...and other times they seem so very scattered...eh?  

enjoyed..and enjoyed amusemi's little ditty in response too

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"and i'd give up forever to touch you..cause i know you can feel me somehow..." -googoo dolls

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7 posted 2002-02-03 02:47 PM


Work it all out as it comes out to you, write out how you feel, we are all here for you! Sad but lovely!

Joanna

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8 posted 2002-02-03 03:31 PM


Can I ever relate to this...As a boy and
a young man...my heart broke too many times
and I think there is still some of it out
there waiting to be found again...

Nicely done...enjoyed..

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