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brianbeaudry
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since 2001-07-20
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Northern Ontario Canada

0 posted 2002-02-02 02:09 PM


Drowned Sorrow

looking into the surf as it
crashes on the ragged shore
I smell the salty mist as it
surrounds my pensive form
scalding the sensitive tissue
of my sinuses and eyes
lending double cause to tears
that from my sorrow pour
like oval crystals down my cheek
to fall on granite stone
rock, as hard and heavy
and cold as my heart, forged
in the fires of love’s molten core
then spat of to chill
and harden, rejected,
no longer needed, dying alone
pounded by the ocean’s
storm-raged waves of grief
drowned in self-pity
buried in the silt of deceit.
the gull’s laughter, directed
at my misery, mocking my pain
making jest of the love
I gained but only tasted brief
laugh you dismal fowl while you may
I will not suffer this long
you may soar on the waves of
rage’s heat lifting from this torn soul
but soon these hot currents
will chill and pull you down to hell
where my soul of blackest despair
and yours of mocking belong
enough of this banter, I’ll not
give satisfaction to your gloat
come with me as I cut the air
and descend in flight equal to
yours in grace and mockery
to terminate in saline
blanket, engulfed in its energy
breathing it into my throat
and lungs, drowning the fire
of anguish inflicted me by her
shallow unfaithful heart.
free of this burden, never to be
burned again by love’s
heartless flame nor ridiculed for
loving too much
life ebbs slowly as
vision blurs

Brian Beaudry

[This message has been edited by brianbeaudry (02-02-2002 02:09 PM).]

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2002-02-02 02:12 PM


Happens to all of us...some of us are better at getting over it then others...not me...James
Magnus
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2 posted 2002-02-02 02:18 PM


Brian...I can see that you have dug deep into
the core of your emotions to write this poem.
MUCH feelings in this...excellent..

Enchantress
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3 posted 2002-02-02 02:58 PM


Gee Brian, you okay?  This is very emotional and extremely well done.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Mistletoe Angel
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4 posted 2002-02-02 03:02 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Brian, I can feel the angst in these words from your heart, I hope you are OK now and now you are filled with a love that can care for you and relate to how you feel! (sad sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is so intense but well-written! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia
5 posted 2002-02-02 03:22 PM


Hello Brian

Your words were extremely powerful and chilled me to the core.  Being a past sufferer of depression I could so easily relate to this, however, it troubled me to think that you were experiencing this pain now and I hope that isn't so?

Take care my friend.......Sue

Suetang

sodpossom
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6 posted 2002-02-02 03:45 PM


Very emotional and powerful!Nice job!
Startime
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7 posted 2002-02-02 11:35 PM


Oh gosh...dear man....I know you are suffering and my heart goes out to you...I also know writing is your way to heal...but, my friend...it still tears at my heart that you hurt so...You know how to find me if you need to talk....**big big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

ecrivan
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8 posted 2002-02-02 11:45 PM


I do hope this storm has past and that you do not lend your heart and soul to depressive
bouts! It is well done, Brian


peaches73533
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OK, USA
9 posted 2002-02-03 12:23 PM


Brian,
Thank you for sharing such deep emotions with us.I know it couldn't have been easy.I hope your storm has passed.
Peaches

peppermint35
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10 posted 2002-02-03 02:17 AM


Brian, this was so well done that each word tore into my heart... I know this pain and this anger and ... this despair...

Lots of hugs, Brian.. keep on writing this out...

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

Irish Rose
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11 posted 2002-02-03 04:55 AM


you write, I'll read, I know this feeling, yes, you sure must have dug deep deep for this, I've been to this shore........

Kathleen--(Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee



passing shadows
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12 posted 2002-02-03 05:07 AM


if it helps, I'll let you know that I've been there too
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