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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-02-02 10:26 AM





For Him

She came to him, there, and entered deep his soul
And felt now he, awash, as if upon a craggy shoal
She swept words to his heart, as if they had been tethered
There, forever, shall she be, until his end of never

She breathes life into his heart, where she lightly strokes
A chord, a spell, a place not met, but where he has stoked
The flame of her in his voice, and again then in his rhyme
To promise between the two of them, yes, there will be the time

Where they shall meet to gaze and whisper, a kiss upon her ear
And he shall know just how to sweep her up in midnight’s clear
And lay her upon the rose-strewn bed, a bower made for her
As she shall shower him anew, he has never been so sure.

She comes to him, then, entering deep his soul
She breathes life into his heart, which she lightly strokes
In trust they hold, gaze and whisper, his kiss soft upon her ear
She holds his heart ever gently, and whispers to him, “dear”.




Revised
02.02.02


© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-02 10:30 AM


Goodness Kari...this is awesome...really is.
Takes my breath away and gives me goosebumps.
And I am not just saying it to make you feel
good....THIS IS AWESOME!!!!!!

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2 posted 2002-02-02 10:33 AM


This is a very beautiful gift. He is very, very lucky. Thanks for sharing.

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3 posted 2002-02-02 10:37 AM


loved it
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4 posted 2002-02-02 10:52 AM


This is wonderful in it's flowing, heart touching words.  Truly a gift is given here, one that's only meant for two.

Thank you.

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5 posted 2002-02-02 10:57 AM


Karilea--High romance, so beautifully written!  (IWIHWT)
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6 posted 2002-02-02 11:00 AM


This is magical. I have been immersed in a book of Ireland and ancient legends, love that lasts 3 lifetimes.. This it so perfectly with that mood.
Sandra

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7 posted 2002-02-02 11:02 AM


This was very romantic, and the last line:

She holds his heart ever gently, and whispers to him, “dear”.

Wrapped it all up in perfect tenderness, I enjoyed this very much Sunshine, thank you!

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8 posted 2002-02-02 11:11 AM


The flame of her in his voice, and again then in his rhyme
To promise between the two of them, yes, there will be the time

Where they shall meet to gaze and whisper, a kiss upon her ear
And he shall know just how to sweep her up in midnight's clear
And lay her upon the rose-strewn bed, a bower made for her
As she shall shower him anew, he has never been so sure.
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"For Him" is a gift "for us" as well
K, this is lovely in both its rhymes divine and its romantic intend.

We wish ourselves beautiful ...
and cry in the night.
It's not the love you feared ...  
but the fall from the height.

~Edwin McCain~

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9 posted 2002-02-02 02:46 PM




(smiles) Ooohhhhhhhh...this is soooooo romantic, sweet friend, your lovely words sigh with loves beauty and the beginning of a lovers forever dream! (kiss on cheek) I LOVE IT!!! We all love you so much, sweet friend, I just know he will cherish this forever! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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10 posted 2002-02-02 03:53 PM


Romantic and touching.Very nice!
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11 posted 2002-02-02 04:02 PM


I really enjoyed this - so romantic, so touching. Especially the last line. Thank you for sharing. Marti

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12 posted 2002-02-02 04:08 PM


Love this Karilea...sounds as though it was written for someone very very special...this is just beautiful.
~Hugs, Nancy~

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  So you won't ever forget me~

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13 posted 2002-02-02 04:20 PM


Kari darling sister of my heart this is truly fabulous, I know I always say this is soooooooooooo good but sometimes even the best superlatives in the dictionary don’t suffice. This is one of those times You’ve painted a wonderful picture here, each line a brushstroke bringing the painting to vibrant life as only YOU can do so. As I said outstandingly good. The flow of this is superb and this is a gift of such awesome magnitude, as a valentine this is the ultimate romantic song. You know I utterly utterly love this don’t you

This is one of your finest poems ever it shines like a jewel in an ocean of amazing delight


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


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14 posted 2002-02-03 12:19 PM


Beautiful - simply beautiful.  This is so sweet, Karilea.  I'm keeping this.
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15 posted 2002-02-03 12:22 PM


Sunshine,absolutely lovely and very romantic.


Juanita

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16 posted 2002-02-03 12:26 PM


Sunshine,

Love the romance in your soul and the beauty in your spirit.  We are all so fortunate that it spills out in your poetry!

Shenachie


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17 posted 2002-02-03 01:12 AM


IWIHWT too! Now that would be highly unlikely but we have you to write the romance in your soul to our hearts.

~* Carpe' Diem  *~

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18 posted 2002-02-03 02:32 AM


WOW
Peaches

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19 posted 2002-02-03 06:35 AM


Those are good kisses...softly on the ear...dear...James
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