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Mermaids Kiss (inspired by Noahs' series)
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Mermaids Kiss (inspired by Noahs' series) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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A mermaid fairest sat alone upon the edge of waters deep She saw him clearly in her heart the special man that she would keep. She sang her tantalizing song as misty tears fell from her eyes Her visions told her he would come If he did not, she'd surely die. The moon grew full one lilac night amethyst shadows on her hair her song, more plaintive, full of pain twas this that drew her lover there. Her reached for her, held out his hand but blackened waves stood in between She shook her head, it was his choice, he must walk in, for it was seen. A mortal man of strongest heart must give up all to be the one to be a mermaids lover, thus his life on shore forever done. Others had faltered at this point in fear they could not pay the price But not this time, for he was born to make this journey through the ice. He stepped through time and held her close her eyes glowed lavender that night No longer would she sing alone His kisses changed her world to right. They swam together underneath as magic sparkled from the moon for legend now had become fact Listen, you may still hear her croon.. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (02-01-2002 10:24 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this is sooooooooo breathtaking, I can't believe I just inspired such a timeless classic; this is absolutely beautiful! (kiss on cheek) Ooohhhhhhhh...I just have to add it to my library this instant, I love mermaids and you sing a true love story soooooooo wonderfully with her here! Wait until you see my dazzling conclusion to my series! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSSS) We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-01-2002 10:27 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
They swam together underneath as magic sparkled from the moon for legend now had become fact Listen, you may still hear her croon.. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ah Sandra, this is sweetly beautiful! I can see Noah really enjoyed as well! This is my favourite verse..not just because it contains the word 'magic' in it!  ~Great write, hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nicely done sandra...i just bought some mermaids videos tonight for my grandchildren..  enjoyed~Vic |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Very pretty. -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
catalinamoon - liked this about the mermaid. Now, if I could just find one for me... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sandra, I loved this bit of fantasy. but at the end, somehow I wanted to change it to "feel her swoon" instead of hear her croon, except I wasn't sure about 'listening' to her swoon. ?? Just my first reaction. Maybe I just like to swoon? [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (02-02-2002 01:31 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I wouldn't mind meeting a mermaid...James |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is so lovely Sandra I am keeping this |
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