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Suetang
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0 posted 2002-02-01 04:34 PM


At the top of the spiral staircase
And through to the bedroom is where I'll be
Just follow the trail of rose petals
And you are bound to find me

This playful trail will lead you
Through to the bathroom door
Where you will find a pile of clothing
All crumpled and left on the floor

Your gaze will be lead to the bathroom
You'll see the bathtub with candles all around
It's underneath all of these bubbles
Where my body amongst the foam can be found

A glass of champagne I'll be drinking
As I look at you from over my glass
A dozen red roses next to the mirror
Standing tall in the crystal vase

You lean over the bath and you kiss me
So close to heaven you always make me feel
Then my eyes open wide and I realise
This was only a dream - not for real

Suetang

© Copyright 2002 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved
Magnus
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1 posted 2002-02-01 04:41 PM


ARRRRRGHHHHH.....why did it have to be a
dream???????


This is good...I liked it a lot...

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-02-01 07:17 PM




(smiles) You are sooooooooo romantic, sweet friend, I'm sorry it was only a dream but I know deep down when you do find true love, you will seduce your love just this way as he will do to you forever in joy! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, mmmmmmm...maybe I can do something like this for my RosePetal! (smiles) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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3 posted 2002-02-01 09:41 PM



Sue, one of your more tantalizing writes...well done!

RosePetal
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4 posted 2002-02-01 09:53 PM


WHAT AN AWESOME DREAM!! I hate when they come to an end at the BEST part! (hugs)
JamesMichael
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5 posted 2002-02-01 11:09 PM


Sue I know that you will be writing about the real thing soon...James
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6 posted 2002-02-01 11:13 PM


Believe it or not this was a reality for me loved it sue

           ~Vic

thepoeticplumber
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7 posted 2002-02-02 04:32 PM


Great surprise ending Sue.  You know how I like these by many of my writings I have posted.  Yours was a dream and a half.  No! It was more than that.  Thanks for sharing your impressive talent my good friend.  Roger


sodpossom
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8 posted 2002-02-02 04:37 PM


A very disappointing ending!I thought things were about to heat up.Before I got to the ending I was going to say I loved the images,and then you killed them.lol!Nice write!
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