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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2002-02-01 10:04 AM


you walk between the dark trees
your woman skin is damp
your eyes are doe glances
with tremble colors dancing

the watchers stare
at your charms
as they rest shameless
on the bare of morning

and your hands
point to foot step flowers
with resting fingers
residue perfumes the wind

they look at you, the watchers
with wonder with words
has your mind been sinned
by some dark conjuring

have you given your sigh soul
to the underclouds
in tormented hours
of shudder dance worship

they ask of your eyes
what habit your crave
what name will you whisper
I am love words woman

I weep without tears....


©Dark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (02-01-2002 10:25 AM).]

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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2002-02-01 10:18 AM


Very, very good. Should line three verse two read ...they rest shameless? instead of shamless
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



SEA
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2 posted 2002-02-01 10:24 AM


my goodness....... I love this
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-02-01 10:28 AM


Kethry, yes (thank you) and thank you for the review...

SEA, pleased it touches you...thank you for your moments

Martie
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4 posted 2002-02-01 11:34 AM


Dark

Quite a vision from your eyes..the final line hits hard:
"I weep without tears"


Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
5 posted 2002-02-01 11:42 AM


Ms Martie, thank you for your read,
your smile, your nod...she who stands here
is fresh with love..in love daze....wondering her future, and where she has been.

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859

6 posted 2002-02-01 01:49 PM


"I weep without tears"  wow, awesome write Dark, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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