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ctowen
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0 posted 2002-01-30 12:00 PM


Passing through, onward wearing seas
under folds that gloves warming rain
only you, gone my passing breeze
steady holds a love's dying pain

Petrified, tossed beyond thy hand
lay to sleep the rest that's undone
left aside, lost, don't understand
thoughts to keep the darkness of one

In sorrow love has lost its way
the helpless wills another's place
Tomorrow lives another day
emptiness fills the chambers space

Once alone the soul and heart meet
crushed to bone, their blood dries complete



© Copyright 2002 C. Thomas Owen - All Rights Reserved
RosePetal
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1 posted 2002-01-30 12:03 PM


WOW Craig!! The last 2 lines end it perfectly, so powerfully!
I always love the way you rhyme and express your thoughts! some day soon we must write a duet. I would love that.

RP

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2002-01-30 12:06 PM


Craig, this one is so sad, but as always, so well written. You have an amazing way of pouring the emotions out onto the page, and making the reader feel the angst.
ctowen
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3 posted 2002-01-30 12:35 PM


RP - thanks for the request, anytime you feel the urge just drop me a line and I will get back to you ASAP. And thanks for the comments, I do try my best.

Kacy - I believe poetry is the emotion of words, in sadness or cheer, the flow begins right here.
Thanks for commenting.

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In Your Poetic Mind
4 posted 2002-01-30 01:10 AM


Craig~

I never like to see anyone crushed....you write an amazing truth in your words, with the ability to make one feel each line, each word...from my heart to yours...HUGS



Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2002-01-30 07:03 AM


Craig...like you always tell me..

let me see that smile *s

hugsss

M

Kethry
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6 posted 2002-01-30 07:29 AM


craig,
you are the maestro in the orchestra of pen.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



vandana
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7 posted 2002-01-30 09:58 AM


enjoyed
Silver Streak
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8 posted 2002-01-30 10:02 AM


Beautiful!

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

sodpossom
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9 posted 2002-01-30 10:52 AM


Beautiful with a powerful ending.Very nice!
Mistletoe Angel
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10 posted 2002-01-30 02:08 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Craig, this is sooooooo heartwrenching, my heart goes out to you and prays that now your heart has met another and has filled you with bliss and loves hope! (big hugggssssss) Soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much, I too would love to write a duet with you anytime! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Craig, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
11 posted 2002-01-30 02:53 PM


only you, gone my passing breeze~

This is sadly beautiful~



catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
12 posted 2002-01-30 06:15 PM


Hi Craig. I know the lonlinness in this poem, I have it too. This is beautifuly done.
Sandra

Startime
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13 posted 2002-01-30 08:02 PM


*sigh* would a hug help...you are much loved you know...**big hugs** wish the hug was real, my friend...

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

icequeen
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14 posted 2002-01-30 09:12 PM


I've been sitting here for hours with pen in hand and finding nothing to say what I'm feeling. Now I do not have to. You have written it.

In sorrow love has lost its way
the helpless wills another's place
Tomorrow lives another day
emptiness fills the chambers space

The entire piece is perfection, but I do like those lines especially.



Suetang
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Melbourne, Australia
15 posted 2002-01-30 10:26 PM


Hello Craig

Your beautiful words of love and longing never cease to amaze me.  You bring the reader right there to the places you so brilliantly write of.  I enjoyed this so very much.

Take care......Sue

Suetang

ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
16 posted 2002-01-31 04:33 PM


My, I did not expect such warm comments.
All of you have shined a light for this soul to follow.
Anyone who may wish to do a Duet, please contact me by mail with a line or two and what you would like your words to share.
I would be happy to work with any of you.

LC - Truth and words help protect the heart.
      Thanks for all the smiles.  *s

M  - One can lend a hand better than holding onto it.  *s

K  - A magical compliment I hope I can live up to. TY  *s

V  - Thank you, happy to hear you enjoyed.  *s

SS/SP - I appreciate both comments, TY.  *s

N  - My heart needs a rest, perhaps in time good friend. *s
Lets try a Duet soon.

B  - You picked my favorite line, sometimes the simple words mean the most.  *s

C  - The thoughts of darkness have been felt by all, but darkness does help one's light stand out.  *s

K  - Your hugs always help.  *s

Iq - Happy to meet you, would love to share both words and feelings on this subject.
    Please share your inner glow.

S  - Hello Sue!! I find myself inspired by your work and comments.  *s



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