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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2002-01-26 08:19 AM



Prov.1: 11-12, 18
[11] If they say, Come with us, let us lay wait for blood, let us lurk privily for the innocent without cause:
[12] Let us swallow them up alive as the grave; and whole, as those that go down into the pit:


She walked with light steps shyly,
Glancing around nervously,
As briskly she went striding
Feared what the dark was hiding.

Too often fears become real,
A robber came forth to steal,
Broke and broken starts to cry,
Money wasn’t in his eye.

She had not a single pence,
So he’d take her innocence
Tearing cloth she gave a cry,
Happenstance for passerby.

A carpenter going home
Heard the slap and the moan,
A plea that he did follow
Walking in realm of shadow.

Quietly followed the sound
Evil and innocence found,
Then without single word said
Bashed the evil in the head.

She released just ran away,
Where she went he could not say,
T’was enough she was alive
Her innocence did survive.

Uncovering a storm drain,
Tossing down mankind’s profane,
Sealing back the dark pit’s lid
All the actions were now hid.

The evil one woke screaming
Perhaps a nightmare dreaming,
But there were scurries in black,
Then he left not looking back.

[18] And they lay wait for their own blood; they lurk privily for their own lives.

Gloom


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sodpossom
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1 posted 2002-01-26 02:33 PM


Very intense and captivating!
Silver Streak
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2 posted 2002-01-26 02:37 PM


Excellent write, Gloom.  
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strbbux
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3 posted 2002-01-26 02:48 PM


Oh my gosh, this is so powerful. What a brilliant write. floria

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Kethry
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4 posted 2002-01-26 05:32 PM


IGloom,
this is intense, I'd never had thought of proverbs as such.
write on
Kethry

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Pilgrimage
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5 posted 2002-01-26 05:44 PM


Dear Gloom,
My goodness. Good story. I like story poems, and I like this one.

Nan

Professor Gloom
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6 posted 2002-01-27 07:46 AM


Thank you, sodpossom,
Glad you enjoyed

Thank you, Silver Streak,
Pleased you liked

Thank you, strbbux,
You honor my humble words

Thank you, Kethry,
Intensity comes from his words by interpretation

Thank you, Pilgrimage,
I try to tell stories with my words,
Glad you liked.

Gloom

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7 posted 2002-01-27 10:40 PM


Late again!  This was a story that held me right to the end, and your interpretation of the subject makes it even more interesting.  Very intense, and enjoyable read PJ.

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