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Greeneyes
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0 posted 01-23-2002 12:11 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes

Letter to my lover in understanding my mind
~~~~~

The Narrow bridge
is broken, missing
boards of time
scattered below,
stones
of loss, and golden
moments

I walk through velvet
orchids trembling,
that
which creates
the dawn,
oceans haunt
for a
touch, your
presence upon
my lips

Silk shadows
and old
dreams pale
in moonlit
to any
comparison

You have
sought to
reach an
inner depth,
to see my
fears of the soul,
but I
carve my words across
distance,
intent becomes duty

I'd give a glimpse,
but would there
ever be enough
so see beauty?
There is more to
love then deep
desire, it blurs
a vision you can not see....

I bare myself
to your touch,
your fallen tears,
tasting the unknown,
kiss the lonely clouds

and measure the horizon


Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain



[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-23-2002 07:50 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-23-2002 12:13 PM       View Profile for strbbux   Email strbbux   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for strbbux

Oh I love your words Greeneyes, "silk shadows, lonely clouds. lovely, floria

Floria
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2 posted 01-23-2002 12:14 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

I often dream of bridges, to me they always meant fear.
Somehow this brought a sense of hope.
This is exquisite "velvet orchids" wow.
Wonderful writing, Lauren, truly.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

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3 posted 01-23-2002 12:16 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Lauren, not what I was expecting (but so little in life ever IS) I was expecting some rather dark and forboding as I have this recurring dream about a narrow bridge (no need to page Freud, that one is transclucent)
but anyhoo, I was delighted to find this lovely soft whisper of a poem. Like a word's caress...very sweet!
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4 posted 01-23-2002 12:17 PM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

I bare myself
to your touch,
your fallen tears,
tasting the unknown.
to kiss the lonely clouds
and measure the horizon


Beautiful words Lauren..and a lovely meaning behind them..hugs

           ~Victoria~

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

                                                -Ziggy

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5 posted 01-23-2002 12:30 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel

"I'd give a glimpse,
but would there
ever be enough
so see beauty?
There is more to
love then deep
desire, it blurs
a vision you can not see...."




(sigh) Ooohhhhhh...this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, such hope fills your words and may you forever build bridges to tomorrow outside of desire and find true happiness always! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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6 posted 01-23-2002 12:48 PM       View Profile for ctowen   Email ctowen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ctowen's Home Page   View IP for ctowen

Any bridge is a way of reaching out.
Even with "broken, missing boards scattered below", it just means you need to be sure of your steps.
Perhaps awkward and time consuming, but certain and true.
Strength lies within the want, and the will shall prevail.
Keep an eye on your horizon, I sense those kissing clouds stirring.
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Greeneyes,
You walk lightly but quickly. Enjoyed
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Lovely words Greeneyes...James
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I walk through velvet
orchids trembling,
that
which creates
the dawn
and oceans haunt,
for a
touch, your
presence upon
my lips

Silk shadows
and old
dreams pale
in moonlit
to any
comparison

You have
sought to
reach an
inner depth,
to see my
fears of the soul,
but I
carve my words across
distance,
intent becomes duty
=======================


to understand you ... is to love you ...
to know you ... one only needs to read you...
for you are poetess of exception and grace.

                      

I'm like a broken record that you can play ...
Repeating (as if it matters) ... everything I say.

Gin Blossoms

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this is lovely, you have a way of expressing
your thoughts that create emotional colors,
an experience.....not soon forgotten


*S*

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"There is more to love than deep desire"


How very well stated, my friend.  

"Love begins with the eyes, is grown in the heart and ends with an open ear" ~Michael Auguste

You've said this very well, Lauren.  I hope he listens.  Peace to you and *hugs*

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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12 posted 01-23-2002 09:38 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Greeneyes - very in depth, but the question is can he see the words, and listen???

BC
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*sigh* such yearning fills these words that open your heart to him...I pray he hears the depth of your love for him and response to it in a way that fills your desires..**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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This piece just left me breathless ... so much emotion and depth ... I, too, was expecting something darker and sad, but this was a wonderful, light breath of air.  Thanks for sharing it with us.

~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~

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15 posted 01-23-2002 09:53 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

and old
dreams pale
in moonlit
to any
comparison

Yes to all of it but those are the lines that reeled me in.    
Your words are always so delicate and soft to the touch.  

(I think it's reeled, now where did I put my spell checker)    

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (01-23-2002 09:54 PM).]

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the bridge may be narrow
but it is stable
and if not
  JAR
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very beautiful,honest piece,
take care
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Thank you all.....time has not been on my side....pls forgive me for not responding to each of you....Be well Be Safe all...


all


  
Lauren~


Twas not into my ears you whispered
but into my heart.
Twas not my lips you kissed,
but my soul

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-25-2002 11:53 AM).]

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A very beautiful soft, whispery poem, Lauren....I often have dreams about bridges and I think its because bridges are loaded with hidden meaning...
such as the bridge between life and death,
between the generations, between sleep and wakefulness etc.
I loved your poem!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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20 posted 01-26-2002 12:43 AM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Lauren,

"There is more to
love then deep
desire, it blurs
a vision you can not see....

I bare myself
to your touch,
your fallen tears,
tasting the unknown,
kiss the lonely clouds"

Wow! I'm not sure what to say. Passion put in its place...wow.

[This message has been edited by Larry C (01-26-2002 12:44 AM).]

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21 posted 01-26-2002 10:11 AM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

Lrya~ and Larry~

Thank you for coming by....

I enjoyed your comments, and kindness....


Lauren~



Thoughts slide out
of hiding and cling
to anything I put
in front of them.
Words bead up
like dew and in
a moment,
will be accessible.

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-26-2002 10:11 AM).]

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Beautiful words and images!
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23 posted 01-26-2002 06:30 PM       View Profile for Kethry   Email Kethry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kethry

Greeneyes,
this bit said it all for me,
"but I carve my words across distance,"
There is more than one kind of distance that amkes a narrow bridge.
I loved it
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


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24 posted 01-26-2002 07:16 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Greeneyes

My humble thanks to you....
Lauren~


Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-26-2002 07:17 PM).]

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