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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2002-01-23 05:15 AM


Restless listless hopeless there,
Penniless with rags to wear,
The shadows covers his shame,
Faceless doesn’t need a name,
Because no one really cares,
Restless listless and in pain.
No rescue no friend will come,
Ending when this movement’s done,
Drops exhausted to the ground
At last completely worn down,
Hope was long since abandon
Acceptance comes without sound
Motionless just laying there
A Shadow shroud his to wear.

Gloom


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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2002-01-23 07:02 AM


"The shadows covers his shame,
Faceless doesn’t need a name,"

You've drawn the desperation and hopelessness of one's plight clearly, leaving me with many images Professor Gloom ... very well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2002-01-23 07:28 AM


Thank you, Kit
Desperation and Hopelessness, images and things I am familiar with,
Glad you liked this presentation.

Gloom

Charisma
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3 posted 2002-01-23 03:47 PM


enjoyed the read, dark but beautiful penned.

Charisma

Silver Streak
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4 posted 2002-01-23 04:28 PM


Are not desperation and hopelessness only dark shadows lying to us by hiding the truth of sunshine which offers faith and hope? Why, with a little rain and sunshine, could we not grow some new life?                                
-newell    

strbbux
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5 posted 2002-01-23 07:16 PM


How well written this sad tale is gloom. You do this so well. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Professor Gloom
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6 posted 2002-01-24 05:09 AM


Thank you, Charisma,
Glad you enjoyed.

Thank you, Silver Streak,
The truth of Sunshine as you call it lasts but half the day,
And continual rain caused Noah a few problems.  
I believe you wish to see only one side of the coin,
Perhaps afraid to flip it over, there’s nothing wrong with that,
Just think of me as showing you that other side.
It’s what I do, thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

Thank you, Strbbux,
Pleased you liked this, that which I know and attempt to express

Gloom

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