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Oz
Junior Member

since 2002-01-18

Posts 13
South Carolina

0 posted 2002-01-22 09:01 PM

You gave me the wings to fly
Then you took away my sky

You gave me the light to see
Then you stole the sun from me

You gave me warmth all over
Then you took away my cover

You gave me reason to be
Then you took you away from me

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-01-22 09:11 PM

No, I won't rip apart what does not need
to be ripped...very true feelings expressed.
We have all felt these emotions..

emily
Member

since 2000-10-03

Posts 142
USA

2 posted 2002-01-22 09:13 PM

yes,we have felt them and we have all felt ripped apart
before putting them into words. (((((hug)))))

Emily

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

3 posted 2002-01-22 09:37 PM

This poem came straight from your soul. Poems like that don't need to be ripped apart or critiqued for that matter. A very heartfelt poem Oz, floria

Floria
"learning, always learning."

Vacuity
Junior Member

since 2002-01-22

Posts 12

4 posted 2002-01-22 10:07 PM

I'm not good at leaving notes, so forgive me. I never know what to say when someone writes something that strikes a chord in me. I like it a lot

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2002-01-23 12:14 PM

Well said...James

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2002-01-23 12:26 PM

I'll bet we've all been there at one time or another, unless you are one who lives in a perfect world. I especially liked the first two lines. The sky is so vast, it seems to stretch across forever...sadly, forever is only the eternity that poets write of.

You are not alone.....

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2002-01-23 10:33 AM

enjoy

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2002-01-23 09:13 PM

Hello Oz...rip this apart? I think not...

DarkAngelChelle
Member

since 2001-12-06

Posts 87
Kansas

9 posted 2002-01-23 09:30 PM

Short, but true, and to the point. Nothing to rip apart here. Some of the best poetry is raw and straight out of your head and onto paper.

~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

10 posted 2002-01-23 09:33 PM

Oh my gosh...this poem is heart breaking....My heart goes out to you...your pain flows so clearly that I couldn't help but feel it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2002-01-23 10:43 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Oz, this is soooooo heartaching, my heart goes out to you and I pray that love will give you back the reason to be once more and have it be with you forever! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, our hearts are all with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Oz, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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