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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada 
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** This one is a little rough, I was having trouble piecing it together. But I thought I would throw it out there since it is the first thing I have written in a long time** _____________________________________________________________ I can't forget this feeling I have burning deep inside The one that keeps on telling me To stop running and fight fight for how I feel fight for what I want hold on to this notion that you are worth this plight I want you to know The feelings that I repress I want you to understand That without you, life seems worthless But there are people fighting for both sides of this battle The strong ones who are pushing for me to make my move. I fear the rejection That power you hold inside to turn my world upside down No matter what you decide I long to hear the words That you and I are one I long for the feeling that I dabble in now and then Help me understand How you feel for me Give me a reason to hope for an us eternally "In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On" |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, we've all missed you so much, sweet Steph, this is such a beautiful poem to come back with! (kiss on cheek) I think this is wonderful and shines with hope and sincerity that your loving heart has to offer! We all love you so much, sweet friend, may you fight for what you want and find all your dreams come true! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Steph, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Hey I think this is great as is! You go girl, go and claim what it is that you want!  RP |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Noah Eaton: thank you so much.. Your extremely kind words make me feel very welcome in rejoining this community.... I'm working very hard on getting what I want. Rose Petal: thanks for responding... I think now that it is posted here that I like it the way it is too.... I'm gonna keep striving for what I want, hopefully I'll get up that nerve to go and get it |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I fear the rejection That power you hold inside to turn my world upside down No matter what you decide I long to hear the words That you and I are one I long for the feeling that I dabble in now and then Help me understand How you feel for me Give me a reason to hope for an us eternally ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Hi Steph, I love this piece just the way it is...I enjoy the way you summed it up in the last couple of lines, but, the entire second stanza really completes it. Oh, I am going to start rambling here as this is the kind of writing I love, so I'll just say, 'Hi, this is great, I love it, and would love to see more.' ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Robert A Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 174 |
oh sure, I know this feeling, never wrote about it though, too busy fighting no, seriously, I like the poem. Robert |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Nancy: The second stanza is my favorite too.... Thank you for responding I think my muse has finally returned so you may be seeing quite a bit of me in the future.Robert: Fighting huh, stop the fighting and enjoy the feeling. Although the uncertainty is almost as bad as fighting. thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it. "In three words I can sum up everything I learned about life: It Goes On" |
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