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Morcastlin
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0 posted 2002-01-21 10:28 PM


Note* I wrote this whe I had te flu awhile back.

The Unsung Lung

Stuffy nose runs like a hose
Throbbing head trapped in a bed
Scratchy wheeze causes a sneeze
Concrete lung is still unsung

Teary eyes blur my demise
Rising fever makes me sheever
Clogging ear makes hearing queer
Dried out tongue from juice unsprung

Weighty chest thinks rest is best
Icky germ will run it's term
Catching cold makes one feel old
Head, low hung, snot fell and flung

Feling ill, there is no will
Aching back just wants to crack
Frozen shoulders feel like boulders
And the lung is still unsung


© Copyright 2002 Bonnie B. Hayes - All Rights Reserved
brianbeaudry
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1 posted 2002-01-21 10:34 PM


CUTE..... not two weeks ago....this was ME!!!!! Great and humorous read Morcastlin
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2 posted 2002-01-21 10:35 PM




(sigh) Oh Bonnie, I know just how it feels, and it is a feeling I never want to or dream to feel! (big hugggsssss) I hope now you feel much better and out of your bed smiling with joy! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this poem is so original and wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bonnie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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3 posted 2002-01-21 10:38 PM


Cute Bonnie....sounds a bit like me tonight and therefore I am shutting down and taking my aching body to bed.  Thanks for the chuckles!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Love is the realization of a beautiful dream~

GenXer
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4 posted 2002-01-21 10:43 PM


Bonnie - I better not get sick from this.lol  I hate when my snots fling from my nose.   Nice writing.

By the way, just so you know, there is a typo in the last stanza with the word feeling.    

Dave

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5 posted 2002-01-21 10:48 PM


Oh been there, done that, lol,,nice write, even though it is about the nasty flu, floria
Morcastlin
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6 posted 2002-01-21 10:53 PM


Thanks all! Eek, Dave you are right! I DO have a typo (even the note there's typos!!!!) I need to either clean my keyboard or get a new one... it's been flaking out on me!

Love,
Bonnie

GenXer
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7 posted 2002-01-21 10:55 PM


Uh oh!  Maybe your computer is sick.  If snots start flinging from it, that is a definite sign.  Maybe, you should pour some chicken soup on it.lol

Dave

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8 posted 2002-01-21 11:14 PM


*giggling* Well sick or not you sure gave me a laugh with this one....*grin* yes, and don't forget the chicken soup...I loved reading this poem. I love to smile and you sure gave me one...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Duncan
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9 posted 2002-01-21 11:51 PM


Yes, this was silly...amazing considering how bad you must have felt.  Could be in the humorous greeting card section.  Much enjoyed!
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