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ethome
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0 posted 2002-01-21 08:41 PM


This is contemporary rock and the three line verses work
well with the music I have in my head. There's a short set
up music break in between verses.


Masquerade

I see the way you state your fame
the latest styles a fashion dame
the coolest look miss Chatelaine

But your nights are lonely girl
beyond that look's another world
and it sets my mind to whirl.

Chorus:
I know you're searchin for a better place
while you're playin out your masquerade
how much time is left for you to save
you're gettin older in your masquerade

It's so strange this life you lead
lost in the land of make believe
with fairy tales and crazy dreams.

I feel your fear when I'm near you
you entertain to hide the truth
but you're so helpless in that mood.

rep chorus:

I know the way you play the game
painted nails and long gold chains
your ruby lips your perfect frame.

I'd love to see your long black hair
across my pillows everywhere
under your skin I'd find you there.

Rep Chorus:
I know you're searchin for a better place
while you're playin out your masquerade
how much time is left for you to save
you're gettin older in your masquerade........

                                 © Eric True

He he that sure was fun. But hey, I'll see her on the elevator
again tommorrow and the next day and the next day and....... just imagining things.... ho hum hum time for bed and dream about her!!

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

© Copyright 2002 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-01-21 09:02 PM


I sure wish you'd add the notation, my finger is almost recovered enough to pick up my guitar! and hmmm...love in an elevator?

"Going...DOWN?" have missed ya my friend, enjoyed...keep the music rolling our way!

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-01-21 09:29 PM




(smiles) Ooohhhhh...isn't it just wonderful where we can get our inspirations sometimes! (smiles) This is soooooooo wonderfully written, sweet friend, may you dream on about her and may your dreams come true before your very eyes! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, I would love to hear you sing! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Martie
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3 posted 2002-01-21 09:31 PM


Eric--a woman with you in an elevator, is bound to fall.  Loved the poem/song, as always I do!
Irish Rose
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4 posted 2002-01-21 09:55 PM


Ethome, it is so GOOD to see you again. This
really struck a chord with me. I enjoyed it very much

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-01-22 01:15 AM


I know the way you play the game
painted nails and long gold chains
your ruby lips your perfect frame.

I'd love to see your long black hair
across my pillows everywhere
under your skin I'd find you there.
=======================================


Does our dear Ethome have a crush? Is he smitten and bitten?
well you sure are sweetly inspired...shes got ya singing in elevators LOL
you Rock E-babers sweet dreams

We wish ourselves beautiful ... we cry in the night.
It's not the love you feared ... but the fall from the height.

E.M.

ecrivan
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6 posted 2002-01-22 01:26 AM


enjoyed the lyrics and well if you meet in the elevator enjoy the ride


ethome
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7 posted 2002-01-22 06:57 AM


Thanks everyone for taking the time to read this piece. I appreciate the comments and input as always!
Charisma
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8 posted 2002-01-23 04:13 PM


whooohoooo elevator lifts your spirit up, and hey I like this song. Hope she inspire you to sing a lot more.

enjoyed the read as always Eric

((hugs))
Charisma

~*Theresia~*  

Sunshine
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9 posted 2002-01-23 04:53 PM



Hope this one wish is a horse of a different color, for she sounds...perfect for you...

seraphin
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10 posted 2002-01-23 05:24 PM


I'd love to see your long black hair
across my pillows everywhere
under your skin I'd find you there.

The whole work is wonderful, but this just grabs you.
Really nice work.

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
11 posted 2002-01-23 05:34 PM


Thank again for the comments I apprecate you all taking the time to read this! You're very kind!

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

Marsha
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12 posted 2002-01-23 06:07 PM


PT darling boy Oh my I’m stunned with admiration this has got to be one of you utter utter best. Truly the line and flow in this is absolutely excellent.

You are always a fabulous writer, in this you have excelled yourself.

Bravi Bravi Bravissimi


If you keep writing like this I shall start running out of superlatives and that would never do would it?

Yes darling boy I'm back, I wouldn't necessarily say that is a good thing. You'd have to read a poem or two to tell me. YOU however are outstandingly good you always were you know.

  
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


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