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Martie
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0 posted 2002-01-21 04:17 PM


The Artist’s Loft

The skylight let clouds
into a room canvas bound
bedazzled with color
dripped and glorious eye sound

Where do I go I wondered
when the path leads past the gate
into the eye of mystery
where there is no rebate

If  you don’t want to stay
just look away
he said with a twinkle
coming jauntily from his disarray

Humor lay there waiting
to be stepped on in a splat of sable
to see the meaning was my question
the answer not the palette on the table

I saw the blue in one small sky
that had been overwhelmed by a red dress
and especially with three eyes
the quiet room was a mess

I counted shirts in his closet three
where a portrait of his daughter held court
so somber in her chair her feet on floor
close the door on such a humble fort

For in the opening of the door this artist’s loft
packed with meaning's twisted tapestry
I found a piece of personal that hurt to see
the painter’s heart was hanging with shirts three

[This message has been edited by Martie (01-21-2002 04:50 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-01-21 04:23 PM


Martie, I could almost, almost smell the paint in this one.
And the ending just wrapped it all up.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

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2 posted 2002-01-21 04:25 PM


Martie...I felt as though I were there in
that loft...you paint such visions with
your words...

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3 posted 2002-01-21 04:45 PM


Oh Martie, I was right there with you, and saw the three shirts, and felt embarrassed as though we had intruded on the artist's personal space.  Your imagery here is wonderful!  Excellent write!
~Hugs, Nancy~

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4 posted 2002-01-21 05:23 PM


Martie, you saw his heart hanging with the shirts and I see yours in everything you write...superb, as always, my friend
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5 posted 2002-01-21 05:31 PM




(big hugggssssss) Ooohhhhh...this is soooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, I could just envision you painting shirts and on the canvas in this glorious poem! (kiss on cheek) Such a masterpiece of delight, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2002-01-21 05:33 PM


For in the opening of the door this artist’s loft
packed with meaning's twisted tapestry
I found a piece of personal that hurt to see
the painter’s heart was hanging with shirts three


You are a true delight to read...I'm never disappointed *s

M

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7 posted 2002-01-21 06:07 PM


Wonderfully crafted piece here! poeticdreamer
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8 posted 2002-01-21 06:47 PM


Your talent shines brilliantly in this wonderful poem so artfully put together...The vision and feel of it was incredible. I love it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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9 posted 2002-01-21 09:16 PM


Martie~
Your words take you to the most creative of places~

'For in the opening of the door this artist’s loft
packed with meaning's twisted tapestry
I found a piece of personal that hurt to see
the painter’s heart was hanging with shirts three'


Just once ... just once ...
I would love to wear your eyes~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~



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10 posted 2002-01-21 10:57 PM


Martie, this was heartfelt, as I paint and I could just smell the paint and the turpentine, and see those old shirts hanging there with his heart. lovely. floria
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11 posted 2002-01-22 01:21 AM


I saw the blue in one small sky
that had been overwhelmed by a red dress
and especially with three eyes
the quiet room was a mess

I counted shirts in his closet three
where a portrait of his daughter held court
so somber in her chair her feet on floor
close the door on such a humble fort

For in the opening of the door this artist’s loft
packed with meaning's twisted tapestry
I found a piece of personal that hurt to see
the painter's heart was hanging with shirts three
===========================

You just blow me away sometimes...
I read this earlier...and was so taken in and enveloped by the images, the detail and the things I read between the lines..... that I didnt even notice it rhymed..ME? not noticing rhymes? See how you do me in *L*

We wish ourselves beautiful ... we cry in the night.
It's not the love you feared ... but the fall from the height.

E.M.

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12 posted 2002-01-22 01:28 AM


Martie,
So what they say is true...fabulous.   Thanks Doc.

[This message has been edited by Larry C (01-22-2002 01:28 AM).]

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13 posted 2002-01-22 07:12 AM


Martie, running short on time, but I'll be back to take this ALL in...

K

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14 posted 2002-01-22 08:59 AM


Well painted, and much appreciated.
Sandra

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15 posted 2002-01-22 01:01 PM


Ahh, Martie, with my son as an artist, I know this all too well for to be an artist is both a gift and a curse...very gentle smile
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16 posted 2002-01-22 01:20 PM


Superb......love it thoroughly...truly a treat to read

Charisma

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17 posted 2002-01-22 01:20 PM


Martie, Once again, brilliance. Chris

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18 posted 2002-01-22 09:38 PM



OK, my girl, I came back and read this not once, but three times; the first time I saw the loft in France, the wine bottles over turned, the smoky air, the smell of paint and turpentine...

the second time I saw a frustrated man fighting very hard to paint his soul, no matter come what may...

the third time...

I saw Martie...

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19 posted 2002-01-22 09:46 PM


The blending of colors on your palette  is outstanding.  Lots of ways to interpret this. I have already seen it differently, twice over and still in awe.

And that is the beauty, is it not?

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20 posted 2002-01-23 04:31 PM



Hey little one...thanks for the "extra"...

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21 posted 2002-01-24 12:18 PM


Martie,

How did you know my loft was a mess?   Hanging in my closet are two painter's smocks, both made by a friend and they are a palette now from all the many colors I've used in my work.  I really like this very much, my friend.  It puts me in the mood to paint.   (((hugs))) to you and no more tripping.  LOL!

Michael

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22 posted 2002-01-25 06:02 AM


such a way of seeing it all :-) I like it!
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23 posted 2002-01-25 08:04 AM


I enjoyed the thoughts you provoked here.

I started to look around my place. What a mess it is. I could write two novels out of it. Each object sometimes creating several visions.

Blessings and warm wishes.

[This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (01-25-2002 08:06 AM).]

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24 posted 2002-01-25 09:32 AM


a privilage to read
ms martie
enjoyed this piece

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25 posted 2002-01-25 10:36 AM


Very well painted and captivating!Enjoyed it!
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26 posted 2002-01-26 11:15 PM


Oh you know I love art!  I read this differently again.  I saw you standing in front of a painting that was inviting, and wanted you to come in.  You saw various things in the painting including the artist's heart, while searching for its meaning.  You know my imagination, but I absolutely loved this whether it was straight forward or abstract, either way I read it, the poem was fantastic Martie.

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27 posted 2002-01-26 11:24 PM


For in the opening of the door this artist’s loft
packed with meaning's twisted tapestry
I found a piece of personal that hurt to see
the painter’s heart was hanging with shirts three

This is so very well imaged, Martie...that I felt as if I were standing right there in that artist's loft, experiencing that piece of personal.
You painted a beautiful poetic picture!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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28 posted 2002-01-27 04:19 AM


I loved Marge's remark
I too, would love to wear your eyes
Superb,as always
Liz

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29 posted 2002-01-27 04:49 AM


Martie, you sure know how to paint the best word pictures I've ever seen.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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30 posted 2002-01-27 06:15 AM


I am late..but so glad to read you now or whenever..You always take me by the eyes and lead me to places. And make me feel from the heart. There are so many things to see and do in your poetry. Just lovely.

Sincerely,
Regina

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31 posted 2002-01-28 04:52 AM


This is so very essentially incredible...

a work of pure art...

Thanks to you Martie,
and many regards,
sudhir

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32 posted 2002-01-28 07:35 AM


Your words took me straight to the scene of that loft Martie. What wonderful images you convey in the writing of it

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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33 posted 2002-01-28 09:30 PM


My hands were wanting to touch the palette and the brushes, and to gather up the scent of oils and turpentine. But the portrait of your artist was so vivid, as was his daughter, that I felt I saw that twinkle within the disarray. through yours, my eyes became the fourth pair in the room.
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34 posted 2002-01-30 07:17 AM


You paint a wondrous verbal portrait, m'friend...
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