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Oz
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since 2002-01-18
Posts 13
South Carolina

0 posted 2002-01-20 05:30 PM


This poem has no title yet because i cannot find the words to name it.


A shadow has fallen
Upon its face
It lies there broken
In this darkened place

In a million pieces
It lies here broken
and even though it bleeds
It still goes unspoken

It weeps tears of blood
But doesn't make a sound
It just lies there pitiful
Motionless on the ground

What is this thing dying?
Why was it ripped apart?
The answer is simple my friend
this is my heart.



© Copyright 2002 Oz - All Rights Reserved
Mac Attack
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since 2001-12-12
Posts 100
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2002-01-20 05:53 PM


Your sign on has had an impact.  All I could think of was "Tin Man's Heart".

Nicely done, but I hope it is not autobiographical.  It pains me to think you are as filled with the hopelessness you have so clearly expressed with this post.


Oz
Junior Member
since 2002-01-18
Posts 13
South Carolina
2 posted 2002-01-20 06:43 PM


It is about me. Only two things can heal me, time and love. One i have more than enough of and the other is lost. I will forge on but not before part of me has bled dry, withered and died.
strbbux
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since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859

3 posted 2002-01-21 09:39 AM


Oz this is so sad, but a good write, I do see where it is difficult to title, but the main object here is the broken heart, so I would simply call it that, or what Mac suggested. Stay strong,writing is a wonderful healer. floria
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