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The Calling of My Heart
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The Calling of My Heart |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Oh love, it bellows for thee, calling for the honey bee to bestow upon it beauty that it has desired to see Like a seed awaiting spring, or an angel for its wings. Or a bird waiting for morning, so it can finally sing It doth yearns day and night for an answer to its plight Longing for the sun’s light, for hope to be within sight For it’s pining and waiting, but withers each wintry day It’s carrying on, but fading, torpidly drifting away But it fights on, through mounting woe to find one last springtime show Though dying, is its red glow Soon to burn out beneath the snow © David 2002 [This message has been edited by GenXer (01-20-2002 11:53 AM).] |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
This is so beautifully worded and the flow was awesome! Well done! Love, Bonnie |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I enjoyed the wanting of the elusive breath of fresh air. Love is both the greatest joy to share and the worst kind of heartbreaker. Thank you. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
   (sigh) Soooooooo beautifully said, sweet friend, may the blossom of your heart be kissed by the honeybee of love and may you rise and share a love to last through every season! (big hugggsssss) Sooooooo wonderful sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Oh love, it bellows for thee, calling for the honey bee to bestow upon it beauty that it has desired to see Like a seed awaiting spring, or an angel for its wings. Or a bird waiting for morning, so it can finally sing Loved those lines...beautiful poem David ~Victoria~ You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dave, Nice write enjoyed the read. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* keep fighting on...your love will find you and bring the warmth of spring back into your life. My heart was touched by this peom. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh I just loved this description of looking for love. wonderful. floria |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful style and flow...James |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nicely said, wait a minute there are courtship songs all year round, depends what side of the earth you're on though, lol. Look at the bright side the days are getting longer  [This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-20-2002 02:24 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
good message...like the rhyme scheme... Thanx.. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I like your rhyme scheme in this. I've felt like this before...isn’t it annoying when your heart calls, and there’s nobody listening? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Very beautifully worded, Dave...and I love the imagery you used. All around...one wonderful poem!  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely work, David. Flows like honey down the page in sweet rhymes. All writing comes |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dave darling boy, Oh my! I’m stunned with admiration this has got to be one of you utter utter best. Truly the line and flow in this is absolutely excellent. You are always a fabulous writer, in this you have excelled yourself. If you keep writing like this I shall start running out of superlatives and that would never do would it?  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Dave, this is very lovely. It reads to me of a summer flower longing to hold on through the winter. Hoping beyond all hope that the cold and lack of sun won't end its beauty. Or is this the heart that still hopes for a visit from the love bug before its too cold to respond. Ahh, I like these pieces with implied meaning. Very nicely done, Sir. Cheryl |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Thank you all for taking the time to read this. Dave |
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DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
Dave, This was a delight to read . I haven't been around for awhile because of technical difficulties with my 'puter, and I'm glad this was the first piece that fell into my lap when I finally walloped the internet freeze. You always wrote so beautifully, and the flow and rhyme scheme in this one is just like water over rock - smooth and slidey (is that even a word?). Funny how love is the one thing that we all look for, but always seems to be so elusive. But don't worry ... your heart's calling is not in vain. Someday ... someday ...Take care! ~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
The words smooth as silk, unwavering in their passion. BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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