Complete Pieces (edited thanks Dave)

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Open Poetry #18

Complete Pieces (edited thanks Dave)

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

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my own state

0 posted 2002-01-20 10:30 AM

complete tranquility:

monkeys swinging in the jungle forest
workers at rest
fish free in the sea
afternoons with lawn bowling
than a cup of tea

complete havoc:

stock markets crash
bee hive capsizes
ocean liner sinks
Hollywood slides into the Pacific
poetry sites becoming cold and indifferent.

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-20-2002 11:39 AM).]

GenXer
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since 2001-12-15

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USA

1 posted 2002-01-20 10:58 AM

Martin - You forgot to add on the havoc side, if a poetry site changes its format.lol Nice writing, and I hope never to see any of those things you mentioned on the havoc side. The one we all saw last year was enough for a lifetime.

Dave

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

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Maidstone Kent England

2 posted 2002-01-20 11:03 AM

Martin darling boy this is without doubt one of your utter best, you really are getting to be soooooooooo good. The flow and the rhythm are utterly excellent.

Yes as Dave said you forgot to add Poety site becomes cold and unloving.

Truly fabulous writing

Bravi Bravi Bravissimi

What can I say except this is utterly wonderful.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

3 posted 2002-01-20 11:40 AM

Dave, Marsha

right on guys, did include your suggestions

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