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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Self I’ve fallen in the abyss of self While sighing on the symbols of rhyme Tumbled into the well itself. A little above plotted time. And the feelings that I used as fuel Dampen the phantoms of my brain Now running hot on super cool. Slowed by the blind tapping a cane. Redundancy eats away the skull Of what is left the very best. And rotting ages out the hull And change itself dissolves the rest. I’m running out of sea and sand And also out of calm of lee The acid fumes swarm o’er the land. Yet know not what will come or be? And I will die and live again So will Abel and so will Cain. |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Seymour, this is a strong bit of fancy and reflection. I really enjoy the way you have worked the form and the images and feelings you weave into your owrk. Entertaining and thought-provoking. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Canuckster, That was my aim and wish and I thank you.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Randy's reflective is out... well done, Sy! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, He does surprise my some times.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'm going to ignore the references to being old. Instead I'll read the lines of wisdom's gold Randy can snort and spark and blow But he's all smoke in his dragon show. You are the King of cool and rhyme Bending light, blowing our mind, slowing time. "Running hot on super cool." YA GOT THAT RIGHT!!! ... Randy aint no fool!!!  ~~~~~~ Hey Stinky....dont make me drag about my lecture about "old" poems" *L* The moth can NAG with the best of them. LOL *winkiewinkie*  Do I love this line..YEPPERS "running hot on super cool." yer so kewl  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-20-2002 09:27 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy WONDERFUL Utterly utterly fabulous and absolutely perfect flow NO ONE does it like YOU this is sooooooo amazing these lines sooooo full of meanings I’m running out of sea and sand And also out of calm of lee The acid fumes swarm o’er the land. Yet know not what will come or be? And I will die and live again So will Abel and so will Cain. truly outstanding   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
This is absolutely one of your finest. Melton |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Seymour - I really enjoyed this reflective and introspective write. You really captured well feeling of apathy one can have towards life. Very good. Dave |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, To the sweetest NAG I know. We'll seek a quite place to be Sip green and some raspberry tea Ride cloud nine in the cool of noon And dance in the silver of the moon. Is that better winkiewinkie Randy Stinky. Marsha, Fabulous comment, you picked up on the Cain and Abel repetition theme. *L* Dave, It is a recurring theme, thank you. Melton, I'm sorry and I humbley thank you for your wondrful comment. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (01-20-2002 09:06 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
MUCH better LOL  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!!OKAY...OKAY...What am I suppost to say...You write something like this just to make sure that I become speechless...well you win I did...Magic..powerful magic. **big hugs** A two kiss poem  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is deep with a lot of wonderful things to relect on. Great write Seymour. floria |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I think I fell in the same abyss. enjoyed this, especially the ending. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Startime, Big hugs and back.Floria, Thank you sweet. *L* Irish, I didn't say I was the only one. LOL *L* |
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