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CondorSey
Junior Member
since 2001-12-24
Posts 28
Dam-Nation

0 posted 2002-01-19 02:12 PM



My life closed before
it could even open.

Not by a stranger
nor a sinister villain,
but by the worst betrayal.
By one too scared to toy,
too weak,
and fragile of mind.
One so close,
so trusted,
who never gave me a chance.
As if I would take it.
Denied a taste of success
or the lesson of defeat.
So I huddle,
naked and cold
behind the unlocked door.

Only he who shut it can open it.
But I am too afraid to try.


Let's put the FUN back into Dysfunctional.

© Copyright 2002 Condor Sey - All Rights Reserved
EagleScorpion
Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever
1 posted 2002-01-19 02:17 PM


Well.. you must know...
you cant huddle naked like that forever... though i understand how you may feel you want to.. you have to proceed no matter how bad you want to stay, as time goes by

Honeybee
Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
2 posted 2002-01-19 10:36 PM



This touched me and hurt to read more than words can express - well written

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2002-01-19 10:50 PM


CondorSey,
A very nice write, enjoyed the read.

Silver Streak
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since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625
FL, USA
4 posted 2002-01-19 10:59 PM


CondorSey, we are the only ones who can open our own closed windows. And fear is our biggest closed window. Conquering fear, with God's Loving help is the only hope any of us has.
-Silver Streak

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

[This message has been edited by Silver Streak (01-19-2002 11:00 PM).]

CondorSey
Junior Member
since 2001-12-24
Posts 28
Dam-Nation
5 posted 2002-01-20 10:38 AM


Eagle, if you are concerned, this was written a few years ago.  Since then, I learned that the door was always unlocked and I have since walked through.

Let's put the FUN back into Dysfunctional.

GenXer
Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583
USA
6 posted 2002-01-20 11:36 AM


Condor - Really liked this a lot.  From a person who has never crossed the threshold of many unlocked doors, I am glad to hear you ventured through this one.  Nice writing.

Dave

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