Candles Melting - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-01-19 10:50 AM

Strum the guitar
Softly
Upon this hesitant soul,
That which soars
In horizons not
Met by the sky

I breathe in passionate
Stories among your mind
Where rainbows and last
Snowflakes fall

Your music plays
Beauty to haunt rose
Petals with soft
Touch bending
Sunlight behind
Earth's wall

You left time
Fractured in a silver
Streak, that kisses
The mist of meadows
And whispers softly
Upon flesh

I am lost in regard,
Reaching past the
Storms of pain to
Settle along the
Shadows edge

Still

I heard candles
Melting as memory
Fades within
Gentle existence

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-19-2002 10:51 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2002-01-19 10:56 AM

Greeneyes,
Beautifully done, I enjoyed the read.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2002-01-19 10:57 AM

Oh my gosh....your words feel so very tender and soft like the quiet whisper of a single snowflake as it falls...I love it. Absolutely beautiful. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

3 posted 2002-01-19 11:13 AM

Lauren,
Such a soothing and tender read. You know how to dispel tension and stress so well! thanks>

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-01-19 11:15 AM

You left time
Fractured in a silver
Streak, that kisses
The mist of meadows
And whispers softly
Upon flesh

I am lost in regard,
Reaching past the
Storms of pain to
Settle along the
Shadows edge

Still

I heard candles
Melting as memory
Fades within
Gentle existence
==================================

the kind of melting that warms our soul and lights our night with promises kept ... and the traces left behind.
you know that I know --that you know.

This is exquisitly you..and another keeper for my treasure chest.

It's not like you to say sorry
I was waiting on a different story
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breakin'

~nickleback~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2002-01-19 11:27 AM

You left time
Fractured in a silver
Streak, that kisses
The mist of meadows
And whispers softly
Upon flesh

Loved those lines Lauren..and the beauty of the whole poem.

enjoyed very much

~Victoria~

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

-Ziggy

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2002-01-19 12:34 PM

Lauren sometimes I just don't know what words to say when I read your poetry. I know your soul and how beautiful it is, and the way you write it in words truly touches me. It makes you who you are.....and I really enjoy who you are. Hugs dear Lady.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2002-01-19 12:42 PM

Greeneyes - I love that guitar as you blended the music and your thoughts into this writing. Excellent. I enjoy reading your poems...

BC

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-01-19 12:42 PM

(smiles) Ooohhhhhh...I love this, this is soooooooo beautiful! (kiss on cheek) Your lovely words dance like snowflakes and kiss the petals of a rose and ignite the beauty of such memories from your loving heart, I love it!!! We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

9 posted 2002-01-19 12:46 PM

" I heard candles melting" 0000h sooo nice, I like this. floria

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

10 posted 2002-01-19 09:55 PM

Lauren, the poem is lovely, I love candles and this is a beautiful thread!

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

11 posted 2002-01-19 10:01 PM

I have enjoyed this read and the way it leads to the candles that burn. Enjoy listening to candles burn too!

Bravo.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

12 posted 2002-01-19 10:08 PM

Lauren~Hush, be still....hear them melting?
Lovely....just exquisite!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

13 posted 2002-01-19 11:20 PM

outstanding, the last stanza especially.
and no, i am NOT going to quote it, you can scroll up

i like!
-Dave

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

14 posted 2002-01-20 12:37 PM

I have to agree with napalm,
The last verse is exceptional.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

15 posted 2002-01-20 11:04 PM

to hear a candle melt. . . would indeed be to know the secrets of the universe. . .

outstanding Lauren. . . truly. . .

------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

16 posted 2002-01-20 11:12 PM

EXQUISITE POEM!!!! Very well-done. Good poetics here. ***Ivy Rose

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

17 posted 2002-01-21 06:29 AM

I love it.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

18 posted 2002-01-21 03:20 PM

YES...me thinks you have dones this very very
well...like very much...

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

19 posted 2002-01-21 03:22 PM

Very nice...James

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

20 posted 2002-01-21 07:30 PM

enjoyed

one of your best

Irie
Senior Member

since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

21 posted 2002-01-21 07:50 PM

Lauren,

I was left with chills.
This is a wonderful piece of work.
Not only did it paint a beautiful picture in my mind,
your words flowed perfectly.
I love it!

~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

22 posted 2002-01-21 08:31 PM

Very well written. I like it.

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

23 posted 2002-01-21 08:40 PM

This, Lauren, is no ramble ...
it trapped me among thoughts
of silent memories
soft music which they make
in my mind,
in my heart ...
all by the burning candlight
of my being,
my soul ...
tender existence.

Well done and thank you
for the memories!!

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

24 posted 2002-01-21 09:13 PM

What a beautiful poem, Lauren...and what a beautiful sound it must be...to hear candles melting.

I heard candles
Melting as memory
Fades within
Gentle existence

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (01-21-2002 09:14 PM).]

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

25 posted 2002-01-21 10:14 PM

Excellent poetry. A pleasure to read.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

26 posted 2002-01-21 10:54 PM

I am more then humbled by these replies....and so blessed to have found passions....please accept my thanks and love to you all.....

Lauren~

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-21-2002 10:54 PM).]

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

27 posted 2002-04-09 02:02 AM

Lauren,

I can only wish to write like this. Your thoughts and words are so beautiful.. I enjoy everytime.

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

28 posted 2002-07-13 08:47 AM

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

29 posted 2003-01-22 03:14 AM

awesome!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

30 posted 2004-10-09 10:56 AM

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.