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Candles Melting

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Greeneyes
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0 posted 01-19-2002 10:50 AM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes

Strum the guitar
Softly
Upon this hesitant soul,
That which soars
In horizons not
Met by the sky

I breathe in passionate
Stories among your mind
Where rainbows and last
Snowflakes fall

Your music plays
Beauty to haunt rose
Petals with soft
Touch bending
Sunlight behind
Earth's wall

You left time
Fractured in a silver
Streak, that kisses
The mist of meadows
And whispers softly
Upon flesh

I am lost in regard,
Reaching past the
Storms of pain to
Settle along the
Shadows edge

Still

I heard candles
Melting as memory
Fades within
Gentle existence



Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain


[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-19-2002 10:51 AM).]

© Copyright 2002 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-19-2002 10:56 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Greeneyes,
Beautifully done, I enjoyed the read.
Startime
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2 posted 01-19-2002 10:57 AM       View Profile for Startime   Email Startime   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Startime's Home Page   View IP for Startime

Oh my gosh....your words feel so very tender and soft like the quiet whisper of a single snowflake as it falls...I love it. Absolutely beautiful. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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3 posted 01-19-2002 11:13 AM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Lauren,
Such a soothing and tender read. You know how to dispel tension and stress so well! thanks>
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4 posted 01-19-2002 11:15 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

You left time
Fractured in a silver
Streak, that kisses
The mist of meadows
And whispers softly
Upon flesh


I am lost in regard,
Reaching past the
Storms of pain to
Settle along the
Shadows edge

Still

I heard candles
Melting as memory
Fades within
Gentle existence

==================================


the kind of melting that warms our soul and lights our night with promises kept ... and the traces left behind.
you know that I know --that you know.
This is exquisitly you..and another keeper for my treasure chest.






It's not like you to say sorry
I was waiting on a different story
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breakin'

~nickleback~

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5 posted 01-19-2002 11:27 AM       View Profile for Victoria   Email Victoria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Victoria

You left time
Fractured in a silver
Streak, that kisses
The mist of meadows
And whispers softly
Upon flesh


Loved those lines Lauren..and the beauty of the whole poem. enjoyed very much

               ~Victoria~

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

                                                -Ziggy

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6 posted 01-19-2002 12:34 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Lauren sometimes I just don't know what words to say when I read your poetry.  I know your soul and how beautiful it is, and the way you write it in words truly touches me.  It makes you who you are.....and I really enjoy who you are.  Hugs dear Lady.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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Greeneyes - I love that guitar as you blended the music and your thoughts into this writing. Excellent. I enjoy reading your poems...

BC
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(smiles) Ooohhhhhh...I love this, this is soooooooo beautiful! (kiss on cheek) Your lovely words dance like snowflakes and kiss the petals of a rose and ignite the beauty of such memories from your loving heart, I love it!!! We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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" I heard candles melting"   0000h sooo nice, I like this. floria
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10 posted 01-19-2002 09:55 PM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

Lauren, the poem is lovely, I love candles and this is a beautiful thread!

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

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I have enjoyed this read and the way it leads to the candles that burn. Enjoy listening to candles burn too! Bravo.

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12 posted 01-19-2002 10:08 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Lauren~Hush, be still....hear them melting?
Lovely....just exquisite!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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13 posted 01-19-2002 11:20 PM       View Profile for NapalmsConstantlyConfused   Email NapalmsConstantlyConfused   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NapalmsConstantlyConfused

outstanding, the last stanza especially.
and no, i am NOT going to quote it, you can scroll up
i like!
-Dave
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on the horizon of a fairytale


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I have to agree with napalm,
The last verse is exceptional.
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to hear a candle melt. . . would indeed be to know the secrets of the universe. . .

outstanding Lauren. . . truly. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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16 posted 01-20-2002 11:12 PM       View Profile for Ivy Rose   Email Ivy Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ivy Rose

EXQUISITE POEM!!!! Very well-done. Good poetics here.  ***Ivy Rose
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17 posted 01-21-2002 06:29 AM       View Profile for walker   Email walker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for walker

I love it.
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18 posted 01-21-2002 03:20 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

YES...me thinks you have dones this very very
well...like very much...
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Very nice...James
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enjoyed one of your best
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Lauren,

I was left with chills.
This is a wonderful piece of work.
Not only did it paint a beautiful picture in my mind,
your words flowed perfectly.
I love it!

~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"


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Very well written. I like it.
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This, Lauren, is no ramble ...
it trapped me among thoughts
of silent memories
soft music which they make
in my mind,
in my heart ...
all by the burning candlight
of my being,
my soul ...
tender existence.

Well done and thank you
for the memories!!
Madame Chipmunk
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What a beautiful poem, Lauren...and what a beautiful sound it must be...to hear candles melting.

I heard candles
Melting as memory
Fades within
Gentle existence





copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (01-21-2002 09:14 PM).]

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