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kaile
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0 posted 2002-01-18 11:42 PM


Yours truly could always sleep in the vehicle
despite the unfavourable conditions
Packed like cowering refugees under the hull of a ship,
we had to forego the fan and
cringed at the steady rumbling sound
our travelling prison was making

The brakes were pulled
My buddy poked me in the ribs
I woke up, glad that I was a shorty
(otherwise, I might hit the ceiling)
and disgusted that I napped again,
despite my self-reproaches not to

We got off fast and charged forwards,
yelling our cries half-heartedly "Charge!!"
while firing blanks blindly

Simulated enemies destroyed
We mounted up the vehicle
I caught up on my beauty sleep again,
much to everyone's chagrin

The vicious cycle continued
until the whims of my commanders
were indulged
totally


© Copyright 2002 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-01-18 11:52 PM


OUCH! Been there - done that. My back still hurts!!
dgvarner
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2 posted 2002-01-19 03:58 AM


i dont know why....but i enjoy military tales....

and somehow..not even knowing what you look like..i see you in this story!  

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

[he] comes to me when i'm feelin' down..inspires me without a sound..[he] touches me... -b joel

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3 posted 2002-01-19 05:08 AM


Totally...James
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4 posted 2002-01-20 01:01 PM


Ha... U sound almost like a robot. Turn the switch on and you start charging. Switch it off, and you're back to your 'standby' mode.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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5 posted 2002-01-20 01:04 PM


*sigh* being and old army brat I was drawn by your title but then the truth of your poem hit my heart and I felt again so much that I experienced from the telling of those around me. *sigh* This poem touched me deeply...thank you for posting it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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6 posted 2002-01-20 01:09 PM




BRAVO!!! Such a powerful tale, sweet friend, this speaks so strongly and powerfully! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Heng, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2002-01-20 03:43 PM


"Yours truly could always sleep in the vehicle
despite the unfavourable conditions"
A true survivalist habit! Very good reading you again, you always have something interesting and unique to read.

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