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craigrk
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0 posted 2002-01-18 09:01 PM



Throw away your
mascara, mousse
and underwear.
Wear these lines
for a week,
just one week,
not a long time.

Let the words
mold your face,
drape your shoulders,
delicate breasts.
Let the lyric
infuse your dreams,
scent your pillows
press your thighs
with invisible weight.

At the end of the week
if these Emperor’s clothes
are your neon poem,
call me. I’ll be here
on hold,
won’t have eaten,
but won’t rewrite.
You are new ink
that will not dry.

© Copyright 2002 craigrk - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-01-18 09:29 PM



Love the last two lines!

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2 posted 2002-01-18 09:47 PM


Craig~Enjoyed the entire piece.  Great ending...thoroughly enjoyable read!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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3 posted 2002-01-18 09:52 PM




(smiles) Ooohhhhhh...this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, yes...poetry is always the mascara of thought, the pearls of beauty, the makeup of originality, I LOVE IT!!! I too love the whole piece and the last two lines very much, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Craig, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Madame Chipmunk
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4 posted 2002-01-18 11:20 PM


Very beautifully written, Craig.
I especially loved these lines

Let the words
mold your face,
drape your shoulders,
delicate breasts.
Let the lyric
infuse your dreams,
scent your pillows
press your thighs
with invisible weight.

Great job on this one.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

craigrk
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5 posted 2002-01-19 12:42 PM


thanks for all the kind words of encouragement.
strbbux
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6 posted 2002-01-19 02:41 PM


craig, I love this, the last two lines are fantastic, I went to your site and I love your work, floria
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