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brianbeaudry
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0 posted 2002-01-18 06:32 PM


Free Captive

In gentle point you race the sky
Your song gifts peace of mind
As each new leader comes to front
Last falls in ranks behind

In form of “V” you grace my sight
Motions strong and flowing
How I envy your gift of flight
Places you’ll be going

Each spring and fall you gift me awe
Free captive of your grace
Incurring comfort in your flight
And soft feathered embrace

Brian Beaudry

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1 posted 2002-01-18 06:37 PM


Very nicely done!  Good rhyming pattern, good rhymes, very descriptive. Enjoyed it !

Harry

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2 posted 2002-01-18 06:51 PM




(sigh) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, ooohhhh...I too am always jealous and amazed by how Canadian geese and other birds fly in perfect form eevry time they migrate and bring such a lovely sight to the skies! (big hugggssss) I love it, sweet friend, I love your beautiful words and the gorgeous pictures you fit with them! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


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3 posted 2002-01-18 07:03 PM


Perfectly penned Brian!
Can't wait to see those Canadian geese headed back this way!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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