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0 posted 2002-01-18 01:43 AM



I wait for a moment-
when I will see your face,
this love becomes desperate-
when others hear my case,

Through utter silence I grieve alone,
trying to hide the love unknown,

When daylight arrives-
I feel relieved,
knowing I will see you,
this is what I believe,

but then comes night,
and you are no were in sight,
each night haunts,
to be with your is all I want.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

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1 posted 2002-01-18 03:32 AM


"Through utter silence I grieve alone,
trying to hide the love unknown,"
Xeonox, nice to meet you. Being alone can really hurt. This poem expresses that pain well.


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2 posted 2002-01-19 03:08 AM


Thank you for your response.
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3 posted 2002-01-20 03:10 AM


i wish i wrote this.......

you said it so well!

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4 posted 2002-01-20 07:44 AM


Touching poem.  Thanks for sharing it.
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5 posted 2002-01-20 07:44 AM


Touching poem.  Thanks for sharing it.
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6 posted 2002-01-20 07:49 AM


Xeonox,
Enjoyed the read.

Mac Attack
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7 posted 2002-01-20 08:04 AM


Well written, I can feel the conflicting emotions in this.

Cheers!

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8 posted 2002-01-20 10:36 AM


Hi there,

I have missed reading your poems.  This is awesome, powerful.. well written.  

~LL

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9 posted 2002-01-20 11:08 PM


I again thank you for the response. This poem was written while I was visiting India. I met a girl their and I wrote it for her. The ending was not the happy ending we see in movies. But overall she was the inspiration of the poem and I gave her a copy too.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

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