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ctowen
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0 posted 2002-01-17 12:16 PM


A lover's light
spring's forth the night
shining so soon

Bitterness brought
happiness sought
facing the moon

Romance can burn
so hearts can learn
a heaven's touch

Reaching the stars
seeking one's Mars
escaping such

What do we find
but peace of mind
holding us true

Confronting fear
with moment near
I moon for you



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1 posted 2002-01-17 12:50 PM


Craig, I was really in rhythm with this one, and then the ending made me do a double take.(Pun intended here)  You are mooning someone? LOL, I'm sure that's not the kind of mooning you intended. (Promise not to be mad at me?)
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2 posted 2002-01-17 01:26 AM


I'll admit, my mind was with Kacy's on that last line. But I don't think that's how you intended it is it? Lol
This is a lovely poem Craig. It flows along beautifully.

Romance can burn
so hearts can learn
a heaven's touch

Love those lines

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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3 posted 2002-01-17 01:37 AM


The thought never came to mind .... butt ....
LOL

I was trying to reflect the thought of facing love in that last line. Perhaps your insights have more to vision (hehe)

[This message has been edited by ctowen (01-17-2002 01:38 AM).]

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4 posted 2002-01-17 02:40 AM


LOL @ Kacy and Tracey.  Thanks for not mooning us, ct!

What do we find
but peace of mind
holding us true

Absolutely.  Great write.


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5 posted 2002-01-17 10:15 AM


LOL, mooning did not get me the same way as the others. Liking this a lot, Craig.
Sandra

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6 posted 2002-01-17 10:22 AM


Ctowen,
Nice write interestig end.

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7 posted 2002-01-17 10:31 AM


I like the format and the rhyme scheme between stanzas.  It has a nice cadence and flow to it.

As for the "mooning," I actually got what you intended without noticing the alternate reading so aptly pointed out by others.

That's unusual .... usually I'm the first to note these things.  Congratulations to those who got there first!


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it wastes your time AND annoys the pig

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8 posted 2002-01-17 10:40 AM


CTOwen~
Beautiful sentiments~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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ctowen
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9 posted 2002-01-17 11:22 AM


I must be feeling a bit old .... to "moon" someone in a romantic sense is to show them love's interests.
I am glad I did not use the word "pie".
Yes Duncan, I am too! I have been saving that for a dark and rainy night! lol
Seymour, the "end" isn't everything!
Canuckster, I wonder what the view would be of the last one ... I guess that would be "hindsight".
Sandra/Marge, thank you both for your compliments.

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10 posted 2002-01-17 11:29 AM


The flow and your words were wonderful here.I enjoyed this very much and was easily drawn into it.
Peaches

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11 posted 2002-01-17 11:32 AM


LOL, Craig, you are funny sometimes. Thanks for not throwing rotten apples back at the audience. But if you did, we could bake you an apple pie.
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12 posted 2002-01-17 11:36 AM


Craig, your words flow so beautifully throughout this entire piece. Lovely. Cheryl
ctowen
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13 posted 2002-01-17 11:42 AM


Peaches and apple's ... oh my!!
Thank you Peaches, I am glad to know not everyone saw the same picture as some,its made me a bit reddened (in an embarassing kind of way).
Kacy, I try to share wisdom and smiles whenever possible ... but no rotten apples, just a very blue moon.
I have seen some night shots of Alaska's skyline ... seen some pretty big moons myself. lol

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14 posted 2002-01-17 11:43 AM


My apologies Cheryl, I did not see you back there.
Thank you for the read and compliment.

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15 posted 2002-01-17 01:35 PM


Craig~

What we find,
peace of mind,
holding true....Lovely thoughts here....  


Lauren~



Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain


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16 posted 2002-01-17 02:50 PM




(giggles) Ooohhhhhhh...I caught that pun too, it's so clever! (smiles) You are soooooo romantic, sweet friend, may you forever share the moon and the heavens with your true love! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Craig, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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17 posted 2002-01-17 04:00 PM


enjoyed!

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

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18 posted 2002-01-17 04:17 PM


Hello Craig
Another beautiful flow of words from you.  I must confess though that I was thinking along the same lines as Tracey & Kacy, sorry!
But that took nothing away from this lovely piece of writing.  Take care......Sue

Suetang

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19 posted 2002-01-17 07:13 PM


Craig,  you mooned us well...enjoyed the
post...(grinning)...nice write..

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20 posted 2002-01-17 08:17 PM


Craig,

    I like this format And I love the words.  You always inspire me.. even if my muse does like to play games *chuckles* Nice write

Hugs,
Tara

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21 posted 2002-01-17 11:29 PM


Dearest Craig,
The moon rises,
though sometimes unseen.
Yet the pull of her
is always there
to draw thee in...
to face her
and all her wiles.

Most Lovely,
Lady Ollyne

"O, learn to read what silent love hath writ:
To hear with eyes belongs to love's fine wit"...Shakespeare

ctowen
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22 posted 2002-01-18 12:36 PM


Lauren, peace of mind can take one to great distances. Thank you for your read as always.
Noah, thank you, its good to hear you giggle!! Glad to share that smile.
Kay, a pleasure!! Thank you.
Sue, et tu?? I wonder if it would look any different in the land downunder??
Barry ... I hope you closed your eyes at the highpoint of it all. Thanks!!
Tara, I hope your muse was'nt shocked into inspiration by my moon ... MEDIC!!
Lady O, gravity does have an effect on my moon ... but I don't think those were "wiles"!!!

Thank you, one and all, for your comments, especially those who felt the need for a little release!    

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