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A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

0 posted 2002-01-16 10:04 PM

Delicate filo,
layers unwrapped
to reveal me

vulnerabilities
laid to one side
inhibitions
to the other

my heart sequestered
by his abandon,
delve deep
as you unfold me

shine your light
so I may
come out
of the darkness
read me
and all
that I am
and that
which I desire

take me
in strength
prey upon
my senses
seduce me
powerless
as a willow
in the blows of
winter's breath

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-01-16 10:06 PM

You shift from the delicate of phyllo pastry to the lovely sense of onion skin holding your words, a carboned moment of keep...

this is beautiful...

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2002-01-16 10:14 PM

*sigh* and do it all with tenderness and love and you will find unwrapped a rare and beautiful priceless gem...Stunning...this whispered as I read it...so very beautiful. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Morcastlin
Member

since 2002-01-14

Posts 244
The Jersey Shore, USA

3 posted 2002-01-16 10:31 PM

This is a wonderful poem, soft and meaningful. The style only added to the effect! Bravo!!!!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-01-17 12:14 PM

(sigh) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, may he pull you out happily and into arms of loving care and compassion to forever fill your heart with happiness! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is soooooooo beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Annie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine puon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

5 posted 2002-01-17 12:39 PM

This is some awesome poetry! my sentences are always so long, I want to try to write more like this!

RP

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

6 posted 2002-01-17 03:33 AM

I am used to wrapping filo. It is my trade...and sometimes my art. The thought of 'unwrapping'...will take a bit more time to appreciate. A thought to ponder this time of the night.

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

7 posted 2002-01-17 07:07 AM

Ah yes, there’s nothing like being revealed like this. What a quietly sensuous piece you have written here Annie.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2002-01-17 02:03 PM

Enjoyed the words, descriptions in this
one, really spun through perfectly.
You have a flare for depth and emotion.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-01-17 03:17 PM

I was captured by the title and held there down the page enjoying every word as it was whispered. Wonderful Annie!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

His Poet
Senior Member

since 2001-12-18

Posts 750

10 posted 2002-01-17 03:26 PM

Such an elegant piece of poetry. I like your style. Cheryl

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

11 posted 2002-01-19 09:36 PM

I need to apologize for the late thank you. I do appreciate each kind response and am so happy you all enjoyed this piece.
thanks again, Love Annie

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