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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-01-16 08:53 PM

My Mistake
have you been waiting
for me long
are you the music
to my song
new surprises
in full supply
the one to
make me sigh
the missing beat
to my heart
the emotion I lose
in my art
was it for me
that you waited
a breath held
and hesitated

oh yes, I do understand

how else could it be
it was for another you ache
just thought you were talking to me
please excuse my mistake

"I have already paid for all my future sins." Sade...(King of Sorrow)

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

1 posted 2002-01-16 08:57 PM

*sigh* I am sure whoever he is is aching for you as much as you are for him...maybe it was just a misunderstanding. My heart goes out to you. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

2 posted 2002-01-16 08:58 PM

Love it.

brianbeaudry
Member

since 2001-07-20

Posts 410
Northern Ontario Canada

3 posted 2002-01-16 08:59 PM

Much longing penned in this poem, I too hope you find this love!!! Wonderful poem dear friend!!!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-01-16 08:59 PM

Oh Helen, I do like this. The presentation is wonderful, almost like a conversation.
Enjoyed so much!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

5 posted 2002-01-16 09:11 PM

He made a BIG mistake, he should've scooped you right up and treasured you!

RP

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2002-01-16 10:13 PM

No, I fear it would be his mistake if he longed for another. This is very well written. Enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2002-01-16 10:16 PM

is it ever really a mistake???

wonderfully done helen. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2002-01-16 11:17 PM

helen - very telling write. Perhaps at times some things that seem real, are only words written...

BC

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-01-17 09:39 AM

(sigh) Such yearning fills these words, sweet friend, I too pray with all my heart that he too feels the same way you do and you can again forgive each other and love on and on! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

His Poet
Senior Member

since 2001-12-18

Posts 750

10 posted 2002-01-17 09:51 AM

Helen, I enjoyed your poem very much. I love the format you used. The casual conversation feel makes it very real to your readers. Only problem is the sad ending. Cheryl

OWG
Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 155
California

11 posted 2002-01-17 10:00 AM

cool tunes Slickster
the ebb and flow
of wondering

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

12 posted 2002-01-22 12:47 PM

Oh, the cruel doubt!
Very well put, Lady. Well aimed and hits the spot.
(And it is hard to tell sometimes . . . are we talking to someone else or are we talking to ourselves?)
e

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry

DarkAngelChelle
Member

since 2001-12-06

Posts 87
Kansas

13 posted 2002-01-22 12:59 PM

Loved this piece. I, too, enjoyed the way it seemed to be a conversation. It's always hard to yearn for someone when they only have eyes for another. Especially when you try to read into anything that they do, hoping that there's some sort of signal that they're really longing for you.
Thanks for sharing this one.

~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

14 posted 2002-01-22 01:04 AM

Hindsight being 20/20, it's tough luck!

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