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The Bottle Maker
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The Bottle Maker |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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The city sleeps in Fading light, Glass rainbows Shower the flowers of Earth Shadow and light Echo on stone In my hands, A symphony, A reminder Of time Three am becomes Meaningless, Never ending, Clearing the veil Of ragged edges In various stages I know I have walked This road before With every thought With every motion Yet, the riddle spoken Can not wipe the tears As I watch The moon dance away We move above dark waters The bottlemaker silent ***** Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-16-2002 07:49 PM).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh these are such lovely words "As I watch The moon dance away We move above dark waters" jUst lovely, floria |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Mmmm...have to agree with the above...wonderful. jwesley |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
   (sigh) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, you always create the most beautiful imagery with your words, this is soooooo gorgeous! It's like a Glass Blower of Emotion! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~A lovely lovely write as always sweetie! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Stunning write, Lauren. There is nothing like exploring the city while she sleeps. Nice imagery. All writing comes |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - your poetry, always beautiful... BC |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
What an original title and message throughout, Lauren, this really had the visions going in my mind. Very nicely done and flowed right down the page as you always do Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Shaping it...smoothing it...creating it...and it has become a thing of beauty....BRAVO!!!!The vision I had of this was unique and perfect...though having done it many times before each was unique and rare...That is how I felt this poem. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Applauding loudly! Wonderful, my friend. *hugs*Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
As I watch The moon dance away.... Lovely Lauren, just lovely. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
My first impressions were that of someone blowing glass, rolling, tapping ... forming a unique shape of something to come. I still feel this way but the "riddle" has evaded me. Another excellent write, well deserving a few more reads .... I may be back!! |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Beautifully written. Peaches |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ How lovely your thoughts~ 'I know I have walked This road before With every thought With every motion' *sigh* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh my, This has such lovely images, such lovely words. Thank you. Nan |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
Glass rainbows moon dancing darker waters the bottle-maker silent you tie this together to make all your words flow with harmony  |
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OWG Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 155California |
bottle drinker here wanna get together after you get done with the dishes? (grin)..dug it Lady...such images |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you for taking your time to read, I appreciate all your thoughts and kind comments...  Lauren~  Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-18-2002 12:06 AM).] |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
wow, i almost missed this one! quote: very, very tight imagery here. as usual, you have captured a deep, complex image with feeling and style. grand! -Dave |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
A little cryptic but I suspect that is intentional. I get the feeling you're describing something at two different levels. Very haunting and pleasing poem to read. Really quite well done. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Three am becomes Meaningless, Never ending, Clearing the veil Of ragged edges In various stages Lauren - oh, this is soft and lovely. Your words as always paint a picture in my mind. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. [This message has been edited by Nightshade (01-18-2002 01:07 PM).] |
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