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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2002-01-15 09:42 AM




(This s based on a dream I had last night that was sad, but I feel happy otherwise!) :-)

Blood On My Hands
By: Noah Eaton
1/15/02

I wake to hear your whisper
My heart throbs and gracefully shivers
All my dreams falter to a standstill
I reproach but I gauge out all my will

How I wish you were here
I’ve gotten wiser, but I feel weaker after all these years
I need you in my arms so badly
Deep down my nerves are cursing

But this could get real messy
In your hands my heart is bleeding
And down on my knees I am pleading
Not to sacrifice your love…

Staring through a stale Tuesday morning
Trying to find the morale to this short story
Drafting my conclusion
To make this love a dream come true envisioned

How I wish you were here
I’ve gotten wiser, but I feel weaker after all these years
I need you in my arms so badly
Deep down my nerves are cursing

But this could get real messy
In your hands my heart is bleeding
And down on my knees I am pleading
Not to sacrifice your love…

All I want is to hold your hand…
All I need is to hold your hand…

But this could get real messy
In your hands my heart is bleeding
And down on my knees I am pleading
Not to sacrifice your love…
This could get real messy
In your hands my heart is bleeding
And down on my knees I am pleading
Not to sacrifice your love…


[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-15-2002 12:51 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-01-15 09:47 AM


Noah, this is such a wonderful piece of poetry! I could see this turned into a song. Was it written to be a song? It is so heartfelt, so full of feeling and love. Always the romantic, that's you! I loved this! Your poetry is always so rich and lustrous!

Love,
Bonnie

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2 posted 2002-01-15 09:49 AM


Noah,wonderfully written but so heartbreaking.




Juanita

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3 posted 2002-01-15 09:52 AM


this is deep, Noah, and I'll admit the title had me a bit worried there for a minute....
hang in  there ok?

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

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4 posted 2002-01-15 10:32 AM


Dear Noah,
There is so much pain in this lovely poem. The refrain makes me read it like a song.

Nan

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5 posted 2002-01-15 10:54 AM


This is very nicely written my friend.  However it isn't the usual poems I see from you, this seems sad.  Whatever it may be, I hope you are quickly healed.

    Randy Meador

a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living.

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6 posted 2002-01-15 01:20 PM


Oh sweetie, I'm am glad that you are still happy and this was just a sad dream.
Indeed this does flow like a song, also because you repeat some of the lines!
I bet Randy could make this into a song

RP

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