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Afterbirth
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Afterbirth |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA 
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 Afterbirth alone floating in amniotic fantasy tides of fate caressing fragile reality contemplating a not yet navel stranger to internal tide creating my own wake drawn and drafted on peaceful waves soon to break thrust from one reality into another retreating back into an amnesia centesis: a womb with a view © 6/26/00 Bart Breen never try to teach a pig to sing |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Hahahha this was simply wonderful canuckster. " A womb with a view" Oh I love it. floria |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
LOL, that end was the clincher!!! I loved this! It was interesting and amusing! |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
hehhehehe cute ending my friend RP |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
a wonderful tale of life....love the ending as well...  Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling* I concur with all the rest...this ending was perfect. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I just love babies..and i like watching that baby dance..enjoyed canuckster... ~Vic "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very clever writing...and super ending. Thanks for the smile! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
kind of like skydiving huh? Let 'er rip this is fresh, original! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A very special one, Bart... I especially loved "a womb with a view: Its too bad that we can't remember our own births....it must be an exhilirating but scary experience!  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
A great twist Bart.. I concur with the rest.. the end said it all Pepper |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Great minds think alike!!  I posted this almost 2 years ago..Womb With a View If I could have had a womb with a view, A small, tiny window that I could look through To get a wee glimpse of the world I would know Would I be excited or not want to go? If I had a preview of what lay in store The moment one passes through Life's opened door Would I be content to be pulled out with pride Or consider it best to have just stayed inside? Would I have come willing, so eager to see The wonderful world waiting out there for me Or would every soul in the ward hear me shout "Forget it, you people! I ain't coming out!!!" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is great Bart! And congrats on becoming a full member...love the pic! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles) Oh my gosh, the ending is soooo cute, sweet friend, I love babies too...ooohhhh...they're soooo adorable! (big hugggsssss) I love this, sweet Bart, this is fabulous! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bart, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent. And here I thought you had a serious streak.... |
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