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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-01-14 06:42 PM

Distant stars once
Of gentle autumn,
Far beneath
Dark shadows
And fallen leaves
Of happiness

Wings flutter
In unknown space, as
November blended
Time transparent,
Lovers fell to

Remembering nights
In silhouettes
Playing on satin walls; now
Watching silence in eyes
Of gray

Was it a move with-in?
Once?

Did you
miss the movement
Of angels?

Playing in the wind

Let rivers of pure
Water pour from
Your chambered heart,
Before the storm
Gathers its rage
And leaves intent
Empty

In between the breathless
Pause,

I am the snowflake
Falling endlessly

Butterfly gentle,
Release and fly
Among spirit

In your mansion
Of dreams

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-15-2002 12:02 AM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-01-14 06:45 PM

"In between the breathless
Pause, I am the snowflake
Falling endlessly

Butterfly gentle
Release and fly
Among spirit

In your mansion
Of dreams"

(sigh) You always write so beautifully, sweet friend, this was my favorite part, this is poetic perfection in all it's heavenliness! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, this is such a fabulous romance! We all love you so much, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-14-2002 06:47 PM).]

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2002-01-14 07:32 PM

yes, a mission of dreams, wonderfully effective.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

3 posted 2002-01-14 07:36 PM

Green eyes this was so soft. a lovely soft poem. Like it should be whispered. floria

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-01-14 07:45 PM

Lauren~Beautiful as always...I love the way you express yourself!

~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

5 posted 2002-01-14 07:53 PM

You see the beauties of nature through those pretty green eyes! This was so nice

RP

brianbeaudry
Member

since 2001-07-20

Posts 410
Northern Ontario Canada

6 posted 2002-01-14 07:58 PM

You pen your poetry with the same gentleness and precision as an artist brushes his canvas.Like a painting, there is meaning for each that is gifted its view and for each it can be different.Wonderful poem dear friend!!!

Words expressed without deception...Are the beginning of a poem's conception

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2002-01-14 11:54 PM

gentle. . . yes. . . that's what you are. . .

and this is you. . . in words. . . for not even the softest of brushes could stroke so well against the canvas of the heart. . .

forgive my gushing. . . but, you always manage to find the softest images. . . like a dream. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2002-01-15 12:03 PM

Greeneyes - you write gentle words, perhaps this is you what I read. Softly the butterfly, of dreams....

BC

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2002-01-15 12:36 PM

GreenEyes~
You know I love this ...
each penning falls as softly as a brush of feathered verse upon the eyes and ears of the reader~
You are gosh-darned awesome, lady~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2002-01-15 12:39 PM

You string your words together
with such a gentle and delicate touch.

They are always so refreshing to read.

Thanks~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2002-01-15 01:14 AM

Exquisite Lauren, as I read it in a simple whisper, it was pure heaven!

~* CARPE' DIEM *~

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

12 posted 2002-01-15 01:52 AM

this is a very subversive poem.

wait a second, allow me to explain first....

the images here are very subtle. they are subversive, because they carry a deeper message than it appears at first glance, and they can affect you without you realizing it consciously.
that said:
this is a beautiful poem, both on the surface, and beneath. on the surface it's reflective and gentle, but underneath there's a sort of melancholy nostalgia that pulls out you.

truly outstanding!!
-Dave

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

13 posted 2002-01-15 08:24 AM

                                                   Distant stars once
                                                  Of gentle autumn,
                                                    Far beneath
                                                   Dark shadows
                                                  And fallen leaves
                                                    Of happiness

                                                    Wings flutter
                                                 In unknown space, as
                                                  November blended
                                                  Time transparent,
                                                    Lovers fell to

                                                 Remembering nights
                                                   In silhouettes
                                               Playing on satin walls; now
                                               Watching silence in eyes
                                                      Of gray
==========================================

In between the breathless
                                       Pause,

                                   I am the snowflake
                                    Falling endlessly

                                    Butterfly gentle,
                                    Release and fly
                                     Among spirit

                                    In your mansion
                                      Of dreams
============================================

Well, you know you had me from the title

and yes...your poetry is indeed butterfly gentle on my mind and my heart...
everytime you touch me in places where only the butterflies can go...and each time you do it more beautifully than the time before...your poetry is so very unique and special.heart-hugs poetess L

Even thru the darkest phase, be it thick or thin
Always someone marches brave, here beneath my skin
Constant Craving ... has always been.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

14 posted 2002-01-15 01:53 PM

So very beautiful, Greeneyes....
I can feel the gentleness of the butterfly wings fluttering through your poem.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Mother_Earth
Senior Member

since 2000-11-20

Posts 1370
1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan

15 posted 2002-01-15 02:29 PM

Greeneyes, I too was drawn by the title and then captured by the words and pictures you wrote with. Thanks, ME

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

16 posted 2002-01-15 07:30 PM

My many thanks to all of you for the kind replies, and understanding of my words.....I have been blessed to find Passions, and to have the ability to write my feelings, and emotions....you all have made writing and reading worth it....

all

Greeneyes~

Tomorrow's another day
and I'm thirsty any way
so bring on the rain

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-15-2002 07:30 PM).]

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