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GenXer
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0 posted 2002-01-12 03:55 PM



Horizon shimmering from the sunrise
Orange reflections are within my eyes
As this savior awakens from the east,
it allows my spirit to be released

It can fly, though its wings are battered
and it can feel, though its heart is tattered
And I beg it not to traverse back to me,
for today, I’ll relish this discovery

That some rivers truly run down stream,
it is possible to wake up to a dream,
there’s boundless hope in the tiniest of rays
and the importance of cherishing each day

These orange reflections within my eyes,
a gift given to us all in a sunrise,
are like a drop of blood to a dying heart,
providing inspiration for a fresh start

© David 2002

[This message has been edited by GenXer (01-12-2002 03:58 PM).]

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Startime
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1 posted 2002-01-12 04:00 PM


*sigh* Simply magical...she will love it. You gave a beautiful vision of discovery to me...I love what my eyes saw...Thank you. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-01-12 04:01 PM




BRAVO!!! Ooohhhhhh...I love it, your words always paint such beautiful visions, I just know Marsha will love this so so much! (big hugggsssss) Soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, may love and inspiration form in all our hearts and fill us with glee! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Sunshine
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3 posted 2002-01-12 04:06 PM



If this doesn't appease her, I don't know what will...

Irish Rose
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4 posted 2002-01-12 04:13 PM


It's lovely and you know probably just seeing her name in the title will bring a smile to her face

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Marsha
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5 posted 2002-01-12 04:25 PM


Dave darling boy

Absolutely Fantastic

THANK YOU


This is utterly utterly one of the most beautiful pieces you've ever written. See how happy you've made me? I'm smiling a huge smile. And YOU have to know a smile suits me far better than tears. Naturally enough darling boy I know you feel better writing smiles.

Okay I'm appeased however.... If YOU enjoyed writing a happy piece please do it again. Dave it is fabulous all joking aside YOU have a wonderful talent and this proves it.

And I'm keeping it, into my library darling boy.... it's okay YOU'LL be okay the Witch of the web is waiting to keep you company


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1


Kethry
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6 posted 2002-01-12 04:26 PM


Dave,
How could you do this to me! She thought my work was good but after seeing yours she will put mine straight into the bin. How can the moon compare to the sun? I love what you've done with sun's rays oh Father Sun.
Keth (Who is not speaking to you ever again!)

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2002-01-12 04:30 PM


Wonderful Dave!  And...just look at Marsha jumping up and down across the pond!  
Good write!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Sven
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8 posted 2002-01-12 10:24 PM


this flows very well. . . a picture of what the sun can bring to an empty heart. . .

well done. . . and, if it appeases Mushy, then it must be good. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

ecrivan
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9 posted 2002-01-13 02:56 AM


Nicely crafted piece


SEA
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10 posted 2002-01-13 03:14 AM


Too beautiful I like this very much.
Fee
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11 posted 2002-01-13 03:39 AM


Such a beautiful picture you have placed in my mind.

Nicely written.

Hugs Fee

Expressions,
are the most important aspects, they create impressions

peppermint35
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12 posted 2002-01-13 04:25 AM


Dave, just loverly..   You should see my face.. a wistful, hopeful smile adorns it

Enjoyed!!!

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

strbbux
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13 posted 2002-01-13 11:40 AM


"some rivers truly run down stream," I love all your words in this piece, wonderful beautiful poem GenX. floria

sodpossom
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14 posted 2002-01-13 11:45 AM


Dave

This is truly a beautiful piece.Ok I lied.Now to say how I feel,oh I already have.One of your best my friend!

N orth Carolina Girl
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15 posted 2002-01-13 05:38 PM


Dave,I knew you could do it! See it didn`t take much to make Marsha happy. .I`ll be back tomorrow to give you a cute graphic.I bet you can`t hardly wait.Well.I believe that makes 2 fingers I have used to count your happy poems.




Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

[This message has been edited by N orth Carolina Girl (01-13-2002 05:39 PM).]

Madame Chipmunk
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16 posted 2002-01-13 07:44 PM


This is exquisitely beautiful, Dave...
and Marsha will love it even more when you give it to her in person...you can wrap her NY pizza in it, then maybe it won't taste so bad....or you can get some Michigan pizza to give her along with this beautiful poem.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

N orth Carolina Girl
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17 posted 2002-01-14 10:37 AM


Dave,I told you I would be back and I wouldn`t lie to a friend.






Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

His Poet
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18 posted 2002-01-14 11:21 AM


Dave, I'm floating on cloud nine. This is so lovely and full of hope. It's beautiful. Thank you for sharing. Cheryl
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