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ecrivan
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0 posted 2002-01-11 07:56 PM





Freshly out of protected worlds in the womb
young children may speak their peace too soon,
their thoughts once preserved in amniotic jars
have found new containers sent on ocean currents afar.

Let them collect those thoughts on the run
to see their classmates shot down by guns;
some hold those thoughts back, why dare speak forth
others show their worth while in heavy discourse...

Come your ways, they were charged to do
and follow parental guidance from sick beds too,
their chosen paths that swayed, that careened
early opinions were vented, once brought to steam.

As cuts and bruises were gained on bicycle route lessons
early thoughts were imported into idiomatic expressions;
their thoughts, once encased in amniotic jars
still travel freely to exotic ports of call, afar.



[This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-13-2002 02:48 AM).]

© Copyright 2002 Martin Dansky - All Rights Reserved
Madame Chipmunk
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1 posted 2002-01-11 08:12 PM


The truth as written, very well by Martin!
Beautifully done.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

brianbeaudry
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2 posted 2002-01-11 08:24 PM


You have penned this well my friend, and touched truth's core!!!
ecrivan
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3 posted 2002-01-11 08:59 PM


Lyra,

I look a little older here, but that's ok, getting bald too, but I can still read like a bookworm, thanks for clicking in.

Brian,

Your family name is a street in Montreal, click in again sometime for other topics I touch.


doreen peri
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4 posted 2002-01-12 12:08 PM


from embryos to skinned knees to chicken pox and flu to all too soon the loss of innocence, children no longer at an age when childhood should live on, pre-teens witnessing murder in their classrooms...... so sad so sad....

and so well penned, here, martin!

ecrivan
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5 posted 2002-01-13 02:51 AM


Doreen,

Just had a thought again today of classmates, colleagues  that have died, they
were too young.


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