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Titia Geertman
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0 posted 2002-01-11 07:49 PM




You know that feeling to be short of time
Well not for ever, while that could not be
But I've to attend so many things you see
So many things there's no time for rhyme

I'm working full time so the nights are short
That's what I think but I should know better
I have to choose priorities to that matter
I can handle it there's no man overboard

Tonight I should have attended my sheep
But my daughter came over with her friend
Hours of laughter, drinking and talking we spend
And now it's the hour of good nighty night sleep

But still I will attending my sheep to feed
For they have quite a diff'rent kind of need



A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
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[This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (01-11-2002 07:53 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-01-11 07:58 PM


I think it's a sonnet too, I'm still learning either way, it's wonderful Titia!

with all that you are...
with all that you know...
love......

Madame Chipmunk
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2 posted 2002-01-11 08:09 PM


It certainly is a sonnet, Titia...
A very good one, at that!

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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3 posted 2002-01-11 08:45 PM


Sonnets are fun, challenging,  can be very
tricky....there is more than one way to skin
a cat....and I think you have done it..

If you really want to know more about them..
will be pleased to email a few tips...

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4 posted 2002-01-11 08:53 PM


I admire your effort, Titia...
Victoria
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5 posted 2002-01-11 08:53 PM


Very nice Titia..that is called a sandwich sonnet..nicely done ..enjoyed

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Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-01-11 09:01 PM


Titia,
You did very well, I enjoyed.

doreen peri
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7 posted 2002-01-12 03:10 AM


i loved the thoughts and feeling in this piece!!!! wonderful!

a sonnet.... it's almost like a puzzle coming together perfectly with rhythms, stresses and lyrical images!!! not an easy genre and I admire you for what you've done here!

i saw your name in the workshop... on my agenda to write a sonnet this weekend so i'll see you over there, k?      ... we'll work the puzzle together from our own sides of the screen...

great work here, titia!!!



[This message has been edited by doreen peri (01-12-2002 03:12 AM).]

Kethry
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8 posted 2002-01-12 07:04 AM


Titia,
I admire you for what you've done. I couldn't write a sonnet to save my life...all my stressors are in the wrong place...but I have to ask, what are you doing writing when you should be feeding your sheep...unless we are the lambs.

Good works on this.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Titia Geertman
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9 posted 2002-01-12 04:44 PM


Thanks for your support on my first try for writing a sonnet. I know it's not good yet, but if one doesn't try, one doesn't get anywhere. So, back to class

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Want to use the pics on my website? Just send me a mail and I'll give you the link.

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