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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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There was a gentle storm that day.I know Because the Spring was always meant for rain – The friendly sort – a drowsy, tender blow; Delighting frogs, and gilding sugarcane. The rare and welcome breezes, when they chose, Were sultry as a lover’s sated sigh: A dreaming, haunting, murmuring repose Of ocean-born and sun-warmed lullaby. And so it was, to cicada’s acclaim Or thunder’s throaty chuckle overhead, A child into this earthly daydream came, Her heart to songs of wave and weather bred. No foreign sun, it seems, can ever warm This child conceived of sea, and born of storm. ... what if the Hokey Pokey really IS what it's all about ...? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've been gone for an age and a day...it's about time you showed up...but when you do? The storm is raging... very, very good... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh Linda! It was a wonderful surprise to see your name here today so I leapt at reading your poem. I was not disappointed. This is superb...your words fall gently from my tongue as I read this. Simply Beautiful.  |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Thanks Sunshine, it has indeed been a long time ... I was fully prepared to duck rotten tomatoes from the regulars for daring to show my errant byline here again ... Truth is, my life has not been much poetry of late. Had there been anything to share, I would have posted it. And had I been in a poetic mood, I would have been reading and replying more ... This piece may seem a bit puzzling to anyone who has never visited or lived in Florida, as it is written very much from a "native" perspective. I find it amusing that as much as I ranted and raved about wanting to get out of that "godforsaken" state, my Gator blood still misses it sometimes. Or maybe it's just cold up here.  EDIT : Sharon, you sneak, you slipped in while I was replying. Thanks for the welcome back, and I am glad you enjoyed. You can thank Michael for making me finish this when I had intended to scrap it. [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (01-11-2002 05:37 PM).] |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I was just bragging on how you helped me with my first sonnet and here you are with another perfect sonnet! Geesh Linda, your help got me hooked on sonnets! Thanks girl! Now I've got to send the link to this to someone... oh and it's great to see you again! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Skyfyre, Glad to see you post again. And a pleasing warm post it is. A palette full of soft phrases and a delight to read. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Welcome back, Linda! Beautiful sonnet here. It's a keeper for sure.  God bless America, my home sweet home. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is beautiful. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful...simply perfect! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The rare and welcome breezes, when they chose, Were sultry as a lover’s sated sigh: A dreaming, haunting, murmuring repose Of ocean-born and sun-warmed lullaby. =========================== A child into this earthly daydream came, Her heart to songs of wave and weather bred. No foreign sun, it seems, can ever warm This child conceived of sea, and born of storm. ================================================== Throw rotten tomatoes??? At you????? Naw....raspberries maybe...  more like Roses....what ever it takes to get to read your rhymes once in awhile... this is lovely Linda...the imagery is superb and no one can ever dispute your meter and cadence.. So nice to wander in tonite and find two of our most gifted alumini .. so much talent in one house...if the walls could talk they would rhyme right? wonderful write Poetess. take care jm I ask why you come here, you say just because |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful writing, dear poet Skyfyre! |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Skyfrye...A very well-crafted, superbly presented poem. Enjoyed the textures, the tastes of love woven into this poem. ***Ivy Rose |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
delightful sonnet to read, gather you're the storm that hasn't been pacified by spring's welcome breeze, may you continue to blow your storms! [This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-11-2002 11:43 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  YAY!!! OH MY GOSH, WE'VE ALL MISSED YOU SO MUCH, SWEET LINDA, IT'S SO GREAT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!! (big hugggsssss) This is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, such a lovely storm fills your beautiful words and drops of sweet passion patter upon each sigh you express! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, I'm adding this to my library! We all love you so much, sweet friend, it's great to have you back! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Linda, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Not only is this a perfect sonnet but your ability to express a poem from both the visual and emotional aspect are second to none. I think one might be a little homesick here... maybe we'll take a trip back east soon, babe. Love Ya, Michael P.S. - and I agree with everyone else here - It's darn good to see you writing again - hope you do more soon. |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
you paint a vivid picture here, very nicely done!!!! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
i'll throw a tomato - not necessarily for the poem, just 'cause i think you d'serve it!  still think in iambic... must be nice C |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
SkyFyre, I've not read you before, but with that perfect imabic metre and glorious images I will certainly be making a point of reading you agian. Write on Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh, it's been so long since I've read you and I couldn't click on your name quick enough. I knew I was going to love your poem. and I do! My first words were.... WOW! Please keep posting. Maree |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oops sorry meant to add to my library |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Being one who loves storms and loves to connect them to my life this poem really hit home. I love it...It is wonderful...I am glad Michael made you finish it...it would have been such a terrible loss if you hadn't...**big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is exceptional verse. It read nothing like I thought it would from the title. This is a piece you can be proud of. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ahhhh. . . it's good to read some poetry. . . well done, and excellent in form and content. . . you never fail to let us down Skyfyre. . . welcome back. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a wonderful work of art! I've lived in Seminole country, so I have a small understanding of your feelings for the flora and fauna, and the breezes that can blow away the heat of the dog days. Your poetry is delightful. Glad to meet you! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Linda! And so nice to see you again, it has been way too long! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Ohh, I like this very much wonderfully written, going to have to burn my pen...again. Regards and thank you for sharing. Olias. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
So much for 'not being known' anymore, eh Linda?... You'll never have anonymity around here m'friend... Your work is as exceptional as ever.. Someday you and I should have a poetic duel - Ya think?..  Oh - I would've been here sooner - but I was driving home from Florida??...  |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
ARGH! I had written a reply which adressed each of you in turn, but having been so long absent I was ignorant of the 5-images limit, and so my entire thing got wiped. Grrr. So let me just thank you all for the welcome, or the welcome back. _Linda |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SkyFyre~ A stunning return of your ink~ I can certainly relate to the beauty of all of Florida's calling in this piece~ 'No foreign sun, it seems, can ever warm This child conceived of sea, and born of storm.' Really enjoyed this closing couplet~ Very nice to read you again~ Hope it warms up for you ... but you can always 'Come on down !'~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
HEY! Where did this come from? And here ya go...iambic pentameter (the dragon that I have yet to slay!) Once again, I read you and wonder how do you do it? I wish someone could explain it to me. HINT. Thank you for writing it, thanks to Michael, for making you, and thanks to Marge for bringing it back to the top where the oblivious one (ME) could SEE it. Into my library for future study! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Excellently penned sonnet, Skyfyre...truly impressive work...I really enjoyed the images, too...great write! sp   I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Exquisite piece of writing. You handle the form well and the read itself seems natural and flows. Hard to do! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Wow. I can't believe the kind of response I received on this poem. I expected it to be the "slide down the page, die quietly" sort. Thank you all so much for your words of encouragement and praise. Edit: speling (heh) as usual. Linda [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (01-13-2002 10:42 PM).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The rare and welcome breezes, when they chose, Were sultry as a lover’s sated sigh: A dreaming, haunting, murmuring repose Of ocean-born and sun-warmed lullaby." This is beautiful Linda! The cadence and rhyme is superb throughout, and the imagery is vivid and moving. I can almost feel the soft breezes and hear the cicadas from here. Thank you for this lovely read, very much enjoyed seeing both you and Michael here. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I came back to read again and save this one. You deserve praise and recognition for this. Just wanted to come back and save this to remind me of why I started writing in the first place and what it means to me. Thank you for a wonderful write and the inspriation that went with it. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, now THIS, really stirs...very, very lovely read...very gentle smile |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
I didn't actually read this, I just wanted to reply because I thought your picture was hot ... *ahem* sorry... Sweet, and sad, and simplistic... and lovely. There is a more than just a tenderness to this tiny ode... there is a longing. How you manage to disguise the rhythm & rhyme, so one only senses the soft images... and the watercolored bareness of emotion...? *shaking head* iambic poets are beyond me... it amazes me that you could compose this with such ease... even were it not for the dictating structure. it was wonderful to read you again, Linda... if only in sample ~me |
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