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water stone's eternity

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 01-11-2002 12:34 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

A tinkling of rain in weep
a water stone's eternity
a trickling becoming stream
as watergrasses hide tadpole.


Snow upon majestic peaks
return of sun, diminishing
breast of Mother Earth in weep
streams becoming river's flow.


River flows in wicked wide
a river grows and pulls a tide
insides of the earth wax wild
going where the wind might blow.


Edge of water--delta pride--
sea begs to see in ocean's eyes--
eats hungrily the sands of time
in waves of rabid foam.


Refrain of symphony's intend.
Water vapors, sworling wind...
newborn clouds, pregnant with rain--
creation must create again.

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-11-2002 12:54 AM       View Profile for Charms85   Email Charms85   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Charms85

wow. that was a very lovely poem. I'm sorry. I would make it more constructive, but it's well past midnight, and I must get some rest soon. I'm very sorry. But from a poet to a poet, I can say that your poem was deeply motivating and inspiring. Thanks for such a beautiful poem.
Irish Rose
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2 posted 01-11-2002 09:35 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

this makes nature come completely alive.....well done and I mean that

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Canuckster
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3 posted 01-11-2002 09:36 AM       View Profile for Canuckster   Email Canuckster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Canuckster's Home Page   View IP for Canuckster

your words model the creative process you describe.  Good marriage of subject with style.  Thanks fo this good read.
Janet Marie
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4 posted 01-11-2002 12:53 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

A tinkling of rain in weep
a water stone's eternity
====================================
breast of Mother Earth in weep
streams becoming river's flow.

River flows in wicked wide
a river grows and pulls a tide
insides of the earth wax wild
going where the wind might blow.


Edge of water--delta pride--
sea begs to see in ocean's eyes--
eats hungrily the sands of time
in waves of rabid foam.

Refrain of symphony's intend.
===============================
creation must create again.


You do know how very COOL this poem is dont you...
its damn cool...its groovy waaay cool
love this me mystic poetess of rhyme divine



I ask why you come here, you say just because
Could I live without it if I knew what it was
But it really dont matter when you look at me that way.

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now


5 posted 01-11-2002 09:21 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

serenity - you write with such depth of you, and your writings are just, well just, u'mmmm, just the bestest...

BC
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6 posted 01-12-2002 12:48 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

aha. . . now, this is a portrait of the author's universe. . .

one that speaks to us all. . . well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

doreen peri
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you have a command of the sounds of the english language that is dynamic and exhuberant and mesmerising

your poetry is uniquely you and embodies your heart

the syntax, the meter, the rhythm, the images....... the soul of it.... all of it.... it's serenely well done
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8 posted 01-12-2002 07:39 AM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Yep, what Doreen said
Sandra
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Oh I like what you do with words Serenity. floria
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Serenity - Beautiful imagery.  Really liked how each stanza building upon the previous one.  Well done.


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(smiles) Ooooooohhh, this is soooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, it's like the cycle of life repeating itself, where the desert dries the stream only to see the rain fall again once more! This is a gorgeous symphony of nature, sweet friend, I love it!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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Please please please please please please please write a book and send it to me!!!

Encino, CA 91316

Janet Marie
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