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I wrote about nothing
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I wrote about nothing |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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On a white steed I mounted fully prepared to hold on for life. But life lied, inside the circle of my arms, I found nothing instead. My pen took the bit and ran until the ink and I bled dry. And when in the spotlight I (and of course you too) got caught, I wrote about all the nothing's you did to back away from the blinding brightness of your lies. For validation's sake I refused to write about the nothing that I felt from his touch. After wrestling life's decisions and dictations, until I was too worn to argue any more, I accepted an unquiet defeat. With nothing else left but my pen, I ranted, I raved, I wrote. Failures crumpled in a tight angry fist black and white, I longed to deny but with all of my writing I had nothing left to hide. About nothing I have written attached adjectives to nouns, to make them sound pretty, made my verbiage dance with adverbs a plenty. I dangled participles when nothing should have been quiet. I filled page after page when nothing was insatiable. I led you along my lines leaving nothing unsaid, proudly, letting you feel my nothing too. When questioned, oh poet, now aged and withered, with nothing left to keep you here, of what, we pray, will you write? Into my emptiness I shuffle and say softly with less and less conviction I shall no longer write about what's between here and there, what's left and what's gone before. I say three cheers to territory yet undiscovered I have had nothing enough to say of yesterday from now on I shall write nothing about tomorrow. |
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Sunset Member
since 2002-01-08
Posts 80 |
Ah, Jellybeans! I always thought you were a brilliant writer. And I was right.  |
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Carol Luna Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 55 |
This is wonderful. Just wonderful writing. Carol Luna |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
jellybeans - Very well done!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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dawn to dusk Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 68Colorado |
WOW jellybeans I thought that this was really good! I enjoyed reading it, good work Noelle "Hold fast to dreams, for is dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly" Langston Hughes |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You keep writing about nothing, and I'll keep reading it...deal? Deal! |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, this is excellent. Hardly nothing. Very good. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You already know I love this... but I've never had a problem with repeating myself... especially not when praising excellence. *S* Each reading is a venture into sheer pleasure in spite of the sad tone, because it brings new discoveries and appreciation of your talent. But if I had to pick my favorite lines, it would be these... for when you hid nothing, I gained a friend. *S* -------------------------- With nothing else left but my pen, I ranted, I raved, I wrote. Failures crumpled in a tight angry fist black and white, I longed to deny but with all of my writing I had nothing left to hide. About nothing I have written attached adjectives to nouns, to make them sound pretty, made my verbiage dance with adverbs a plenty. I dangled participles when nothing should have been quiet. I filled page after page when nothing was insatiable. I led you along my lines leaving nothing unsaid, proudly, letting you feel my nothing too. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I think something happens to a person when you read it back to yourself and I think that is why I still continue...... Kathleen--(Kay) |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all...I only have a sec, so have to make this brief......I really appreciate all of your comments, and suthern? love you lady |
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