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The Metal Soldiers
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The Metal Soldiers |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
The Metal Soldiers Within their boxes, long and thin, replacements, bright with paint including the last minute touch-up applied, like rouge, from the brush tips of manufacturers who, these many years, have made them look effeminate with rosy cheeks (though now that I mention it, perhaps it was to capture youth that from their palette craftsmen took a dab of "blush", a touch of "kiss"). At any rate, they packed them up and shipped them off to foreign lands. See, just there, at the far end of the living room where the hearth climbs an imaginary mountain; at its foot, concealed behind the dark, low hills of my father's shoes they take their positions; here a gun, there the infantry in line, for close at hand the carptet runs brown and open as the plain that retreats from Kandahar. My, these Britains, such discipline I've rarely seen; see them form despite the news that from the The Times tented on my father's chest drops like a dispatch carrying shock from the front. I hurry now to send them up, for rapidly my mother knits yet another afghan. RMW |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Good to read you again, this is quite powerful in context. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bob--I see them now, in your words a toy is real, and a man, a boy who still dreams. Again you leave me shaking my head in amazement at your poetry. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It is about time you joined the new year, and us, with your tales...for we have missed you, and Passions has not been the same! |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
This reads well as prose as well. Your use of the line breaks and some internal devices adds to the quality and add to the descriptions you have here. Thanks for the read. |
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Sunset Member
since 2002-01-08
Posts 80 |
Ah, you've always had an individual style I've enjoyed.  Good to see you again, Bob! ~Kellie~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You will stand to and explain your absense. You have been too long gone from your post in direct violation of your 4th General Order "To leave my post only when properly relieved." Welcome back Gyrene Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Kellie? Is that YOU? |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
What a treasure chest you've packed into your poem! I just love the last line. Those afghans can pose such a problem. Cheryl |
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Sunset Member
since 2002-01-08
Posts 80 |
See, and you thought you got rid of me. No such luck!  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*grinning with delight* a vivid picture you paint and I had the greatest time seeing it. More please....**big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you, all. Interloper, Semper Fi. Bob |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Very powerfully expressed, sweet friend, you bring such vivid pictures and aspects of life into detail so wonderfully! This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet RMW, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you, Noah. Love that basketball team of yours. Active little fellas aren't they. Thanks again. Bob |
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