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A Father's Love
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A Father's Love |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA 
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This was an attempt to try something new. I've attempted to put 3 poems in one and make it a double acrostic. Read the lines that start with blue, then the lines that start with red, then all of them together. Hopefully all 3 will make sense. Thanks. A child is born unto a man A s helpless as a little lamb F rail and tiny, in his two hands F ar too young to understand A spitting image of his dad A t times so happy, at others sad T aking turns with good and bad T urned out to be a scrapping lad H oned the skills his daddy taught H elping those without a lot E arned respect that can't be bought E mbraced the wisdom he had sought R emembered lessons from dad to son R ight over wrong and the battle's won S tood by his words, every one S oldiers will do what must be done L ived in faith where truth is found L ived for he who wears the crown O pened his heart to those life's bound O nly the poor man will stay down V alued the things that could not be replaced V anquished all that's done in haste E xpressed his love for all he embraced E xpected no less when he took my place Roger |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Roger Darling boy I'm utterly utterly stunned this is soooooooooo incredibly beautiful. I love the way you've put this together. The words flow like silk darling boy, POETRY doesn't get any better than this. And this is what I meant when I said the site missed you, Passions NEEDS YOU. And as for me, well, darling boy YOU know I miss you terribly when YOU are away. So don't stay away too long. Please This is a keper for certain As always Mushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
True Reflections, This is just beautiful! I love it.. its so sweet. And your picture is enough to just melt my heart  Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Marsha, You are way too sweet and generous. I almost got sent to the funny farm trying to put this together. It was like trying to put my belly in a tight shirt. I'd push in one spot and it would push out somewhere else. Like trying to color inside the lines when you are seeing double. I'm glad you liked it love. Tara, I titled that picture 'Listening to Mom'. It is about seven years old, but I don't let myself be photographed much, just in case the FBI needs to update their 10 most wanted list. Thanks for your response and sorry about the meltdown. Roger |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Roger,I loved this it reminds me so much of Stevie and Chase.As much as I loved the poem the picture was gorgeous and precious.    Juanita |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Oh, my gosh, this is such a sweet poem! I loved the flow and the whole thing was just superb in form. I fathers love, for sure you have shown. This is one of the most creative pieces i've seen! Great job! Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Ooohhhhhh...I love it, I love it, this is absolutely beautiful! STANDING OVATION!!! It's so magical how fathers can help children grow and have loving hearts just like them! (big hugggsssss) God Bless You, sweet Roger, you have such a loving heart and you light Passions with its warmth! We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Roger, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* STANDING OVATION!!! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!!! You did a fantastic job and it brought tears to my eyes. So very tender. Magnificent. **big hugs** there is nothing as precious as to see a father's love. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Roger, this poem is fantastic!!!!!!!!I love how you intermingled the two poems! And now I know what you look like too! interestingly, the way you look in that picture is exactly how I thought you would look....except I pictured you with your eyes open.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Roger, what a master weaver you are. Your presentation is so great and the message so tender and loving. What a teddy bear you must be! Sweet beyond words. Is this too gushy? I'm sorry if so, I'm a sucker for caring men. Cheryl |
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dawn to dusk Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 68Colorado |
AWWWW......this was so sweet! You must be an awsome father. I love the picture too! You have a beautiful baby. Noelle "Hold fast to dreams, for is dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly" Langston Hughes |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
True, this is magnificent! It reminds me of the song Father the one that goes "f" is for the faith that shows the pathways of his life "a" is for achievements which he credits to his wife "t" is for the trouble he keeps hidden from us all 'h" is for the help he gives whenevr we should call "e" is for his earnings that he shares so generously "r" is for the respect he's given by his family put these letters side by side there's nothing more to add except they spell the other word for the man I call my Dad. Thanks for the sweet memory. Keth. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Juanita, I love my boys beyond comprehension. They are 7 and 9 now and I hug them every time they'll let me. Thanks for dropping in. Randy, I sat down to do this as a poem to my father, for no reason except to tell him I loved him. If you knew my Dad (ex highway patrolman and looks like the father on 'Everybody Loves Raymond'), a sappy poem wouldn't work. I had to make it puzzle-like to allow him to accept having a poem written about him. I'm glad you liked it. Noah, I've noticed you are one of the most caring, passionate people on the forum. It's always a pleasure when you respond to something with such praise. It would be nice if I could show the whole visual finished products on my poems, but I haven't figured out how to do that. Roger [This message has been edited by True Reflections (01-11-2002 09:09 AM).] |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
StarTime, A father's love takes on many forms. I know ny kids are starting to get to the age where affection is sometimes embarassing. Too bad for them. Fathers have needs too. Thank you very much for your kind words. Lyra, Guess what? I don't look much like this anymore. No beard, no overbite, smaller glasses, same hair and mustache, Teeth straightened (by braces at age 40). You can't see my dimples in the pic either. The eyes-closed look is pretty accurate though. I'll post my 'how-I-look' poem next. Thanks sweetie. Cheryl, I guess I have been described as a big teddy bear before. At 6'4" and 250lbs, the body fits. My brain is mushy, if that counts. I'm like the lion from your tin man poem. I growl and people laugh at me. I'll save a big bear hug (not to be confused with a big bare hug) for you. Noelle, What a beautiful name you have, but I see 2 L's in it. The baby in this picture is now 9 and a blue-eyed, blonde-haired poet-in-the-making. His brother has black hair and brown eyes. I was looking at the UPS guy very suspiciously for awhile. Thank you for taking the time to read this. Kethry, I had never seen that before. My kids call me 'Dad', but it sounds like 'Dud', but I'm sure it's just the way they pronounce it. I squeeze the goodness out of them and then pretend I've got it all over me and can't wipe it off. They still acknowledge who I am in public, so I must still be on their 'ok for an old dude' list. Kisses to my "wonder-down-under" Aussie sweetie. Roger [This message has been edited by True Reflections (01-11-2002 09:10 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Roger darling boy sending this back to the top I don't want it to disappear too quickly. And sometimes these pages move far too fast, didn't you know I'm the un official rescuer of poems that have fallen down the lists Well, I'll never let you disappear too quickly, I miss you far too much for you get the hump and vanish on me. It really is truly an awesome piece of writing darling boy.  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
Marsha, Would the usual payment suffice? Remember, I'm only a man. Roger |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Roger - Very creative. Really liked the whole three poems in one thing. Heck, I have trouble writing one poem, let alone 3 in 1.lol Well done. Dave |
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True Reflections Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 143Ohio, USA |
James, Thank you for reading it. GenXer, I'm not sure I could do it again either. Sometimes you just get in a zone where the words make it through the fog. Thanks for stopping by. Roger |
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