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Cell Mates
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Cell Mates |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA 
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Cell Mates Freedom’s cry is dim indeed when one can roam the world at will and never have the path impede the goal, and be imprisoned still. A gaze into my mirrored eye and I can see what others fear; a victim of biology with cells that walk the prisoner. While others have a radiant smile, I have a radiation burn that pulls from me a forlorn frown and tufts of hair, each in their turn. My rebel organs rising up within my chemo mixing sphere I fight to draw a line of death for cells that walk the prisoner. Within my quiet battlefield I fall upon my own grenade and hold to hope, however mild that bad is killed, while good is saved. And so in quiet desperation I stalk myself, and self inter my rebel suicidal faction; those cells that walk this prisoner. © Bart Breen 7/16/2001 |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!! A powerful poem to introduce yourself. Amazing thoughts that really make the reader think....Welcome to Passions...I will looking forward to more of your work. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Very impressive and powerful first post! I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Hugs, Nancy Lee~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Bart! You have a wonderful flow to these words, excellent cadence, I hope to read more! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! SOOOOOO WONDERFULLY EXPRESSED, SWEET FRIEND, WHAT A FABULOUS DEBUT!!! I just know you will be a wonderful addition to us all, sweet friend, your talent shines in every word, this is svery throught-provoking! (sigh) Welcome to Passions, sweet Bart, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your wonderful words! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, dearest Bart, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Bart. Hello Welcome to Passions This is a wonderful entrace! I hope to see more Hugs, Tara PS Check your email for a special Welcome "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome to Passions, looking forward to reading more! Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A powerful and well crafted work indeed... Welcome to Passions - Check your email for a special greeting.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A hard hitting, striking piece that speaks a lot of truth, mingled with heartbreak. Well done. Welcome to Passions! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"And so in quiet desperation I stalk myself, and self inter my rebel suicidal faction; those cells that walk this prisoner." Intense and vivid imagery here. It reminded me of a conversation long ago with a very dear lady, who maintained a vigilant battle within, for survival against the storm that attacked her body. Welcome to these blue pages. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to our humble home!! I look forward to reading more from you. And I hope you enjoy being here!  |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Thank you all for your warm welcome. I look forward to becoming a part of this apparently very active community. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
welcome to poetry land! I know you will really love it here. Your poem was really powerful and thought-provoking! RP |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Bart. Not only is it mechanically sound but the idea behind the contruction...the cells and the prisoner..and the metaphorical usage of each makes it a truly awesome piece of work. Welcome, sir! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Bart, nice to see you again. Looking forward to more of this thought provoking stuff.Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is excellent... you've made a powerful entrance! *S* Welcome! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Canuckster--The is so much strength in the heartbreak of this poem. Welcome to Passions! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Great writing, bart - the story it tells is very scary in a there-but-for-God way. The flow was perfect. |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Poetry written on the human condition can be so powerful. You have displayed that potential in this piece. Very well done, indeed. |
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