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Tim
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0 posted 2002-01-08 11:27 PM


She is a dreamer,
a dreamer of dreams,
in search of her destiny,
destined it seems,
to climb every mountain,
to climb every wall,
while paying no heed,
to the paymaster's call,
hearing each whisper,
of the whispering wind,
reading each letter,
no letters to send,
for in her tomorrows,
she finds her today,
on a journey to ever,
she ever will stay,
within her soul's being,
she ever will be,
eternally searching,
eternity.


[This message has been edited by Tim (01-08-2002 11:30 PM).]

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2002-01-08 11:47 PM


This is great.. reminds me of a book I read not long ago..."Angels in a harsh world" by Don Bradley.

I enjoyed

Maree

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2 posted 2002-01-08 11:55 PM


She is a dreamer,
                a dreamer of dreams,
                in search of her destiny,
                destined it seems,
                to climb every mountain,
                to climb every wall,
                while paying no heed,
                to the paymaster's call,
                hearing each whisper,
                of the whispering wind,
                reading each letter,
                no letters to send,
                for in her tomorrows,
                she finds her today,
                on a journey to ever,
                she ever will stay,
                within her soul's being,
                she ever will be,
                eternally searching,
                eternity."


Yes, how lovely, a journey that is eternal........I love this, I'm so glad to read you more often, I enjoy your poems very much.

Kathleen--
Neither genius, fame, nor love show the greatness of the soul.
Only kindness can do that. ~Jean Baptiste Henri Lacordaire~

Nan
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3 posted 2002-01-09 07:13 AM


Life is indeed a "journey to ever"... I know I'm still dreamin'.. Nice work, Tim..
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2002-01-09 07:17 AM


Such a perfect cadence and rhyme throughout Tim ... this was a wonderfully flowing read, very much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2002-01-09 07:17 AM


"Are you talkin' to ME? Are YOU, talking to me? You must be talkin' to me, 'cause there's nobody else here!" (serenity's DeNiro imitation--)

Well it sure seemed like it anyway...

Very nice work, Tim...

taramw
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6 posted 2002-01-09 07:24 AM


I loved how this flowed along... with a very deep underlying meaning... or so I thought.  A very touching piece
~ Tara ~


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7 posted 2002-01-09 07:37 AM


This is excellent Tim.  Flow, rhyme, and rhythm.  
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8 posted 2002-01-09 09:37 AM


Well done Tim, I enjoyed this. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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