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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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In my hands I hold rain Branches of time Flower petals Harmony stirring Unreachable in remembrance In fall the vineyards create Color, different scenes Of vibrant strokes In raspberry fields The night air kisses The early dew Wavering the particles That collide in the breeze I have loved beauty I have lived in April’s Shadow of light When winter arrives We forget to place Flowers in the vase, Youth is precious, Time means nothing Like the fireflies Of October I have not rested Soundly in 10 years Freedom is the release Of life and paradise Does not exist, Still we believe in faith And look for meaning A purpose for memory And you wonder why I cry When we touch Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-08-2002 04:03 PM).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
beautiful Lauren..I love it..aaahhh raspberry fields..lovely image..hugss ~Vic "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Soooooooo lovely, sweet friend, I love the beautiful words you write! (sigh) May the beauty of youth and the fire of faith forever shine in your heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is a gorgeous vision! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Greeneyes, Spectacular images. write on Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes, You are a rare butterfly. Excellent writing. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - this writing touched me very deeply. I replied to your verse below. I hope that you don't mind... BC 'I have not rested Soundly in 10 years Freedom is the release Of life and paradise Does not exist, Still we believe in faith And look for meaning A purpose for memory And you wonder why I cry When we touch' "Peace is my rest, Serenity my dream Many years has it been I know not if they exist But still I search For a purpose And I wonder why I cry Deep inside" [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (01-08-2002 04:18 PM).] |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I hold in my hand the rain ... pouring from your word, nurturing, refreshing, gained ... memories absurd. But with each in their right place ... smiles to my face. Ashes read and well heard. Your memories are touching, be well ... Peace |
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Sunset Member
since 2002-01-08
Posts 80 |
You have much talent. I loved this. ~aplause~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And you wonder why I cry When we touch ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Lauren...Beautiful!! How perfect could the ending be? This perfect! Love it, hugs, Nancy. ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* your words touch the heart and soul. I loved this poem....it brought tears to my eyes. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In my hands I hold rain Branches of time Flower petals Harmony stirring Unreachable in remembrance In fall the vineyards create Color, different scenes Of vibrant strokes In raspberry fields The night air kisses The early dew Wavering the particles That collide in the breeze ==================================================== I have not rested Soundly in 10 years Freedom is the release Of life and paradise Does not exist, Still we believe in faith And look for meaning A purpose for memory And you wonder why I cry When we touch ============================================ Oh those closing lines just go thru me... this is such an honest, lovely write of exploration and imagery... your spirit is in every sincere word... which is why I adore your poetry so...and am so drawn to it. I ask why you come here, you say just because |
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Streen Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 169 |
Beautiful, this touches me in my heart. -Streen |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Greeneyes~ This is an outstanding piece of poetry. My favorite image would have to be: "Youth is precious, Time means nothing Like the fireflies Of October" --Beautiful, and filled with such a poignant wisdom. I also loved the last two lines, an incredible end to your river of words. Incredible work!  *Krista Knutson* |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
The thoughts reflected here are so full of vivid imagery, as is all of your poetry. It is a visual feast to read. I don't know, it's hard to describe how I felt when I got to the last line, it was as if the person were speaking to me directly, it just "fit" you know? Maybe I just haven't read anything like this in a long time, that moved me the way that it did. Thank you..... Kathleen-- Neither genius, fame, nor love show the greatness of the soul. Only kindness can do that. ~Jean Baptiste Henri Lacordaire~ [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (01-08-2002 09:47 PM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Victoria~ Hugs to you too..... I love the smell of raspberries....good to see you...~~ Noah~ I love your replies, they add a smile each time I read them... thank you....~~ Kethry~ I appreciate your kind words, thank you... ~~ Seymour Tabin~ What a peaceful thing to say...thank you.. ~~ Bill~ Of course I dont mind, and I love how you said it...your poetry touches me as well...thank you my friend... ~~ Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-10-2002 09:11 AM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Ctowen thank you for the smile.... I needed that...and for your words HUGS Sunset Thank you, and welcome to Passions...I am glad you enjoyed~ Nancy Thank you for stopping by...I appreciate your thoughts much.. HUGS Startime I didnt mean to bring tears, but I am glad this touched you, thank you for letting me know... HUGSJanet Marie Thank you....I am so glad you got to see this...and you know I appreciate your thoughts...your words go thru me as well...be well my  friend...  ~Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-10-2002 09:11 AM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Streen~ Thank you for popping in, good to see you... ~~ Alwye~ Youth is indeed precious...I am humbled by your thoughts, thank you.... ~~ Irish Rose~ I know you understand these feelings...and I too am humbled by your thoughts...it means a great deal to me...HUGS....thank you... allPeace, be well be safe... Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-10-2002 09:12 AM).] |
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